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Thread: BuLLETs (LL.COOL-J & def-jam diss)

  1. #1
    80SHOTS
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    BuLLETs (LL.COOL-J & def-jam diss)

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    kmfrob
    masta c
    edicius



    yo, mayne-u niggaz need to feel this, yo lot talk about wackness ha ha, this bitch is too wack..


    i dont give a fuck my mac lets off too many shots
    ready to die ready to kill i pull my sornoff
    straight outta jail i aint nothing to loose, fuck it
    wackness is yo strong point james, u full of bullshit
    remember 'i shot ya' aimed straight at lesaine crooks
    mayne fuck you, i show you my fist and make u dun shook
    see me i keep it real, but u an ja-rule straight pussy
    i got scarface cleaning my shoes, while i take tims money
    dr dr how many times you gonna bust them same rhymes
    keep on fronting coz u rap 4 hoes, while i pull them nines
    d.e.f. jam aint saying shit, i rob james and take his bitch
    take that mike from off yo chain, coz u cant even spit
    da only thing me and you got in common is that we both black
    but i remain a g, while u fuck men and take crack
    i never seen or herd a bitch like you front
    in yo hood every night drinking juice and bunnin that same blunt
    you licking yo lips damm, u atractin tha wrong attention
    i know yo ass shook, every1 knows of 2pacs resserection
    but dont be scared dogg i herd ja really likes you
    team up wit yo team dogg, b4 i snipe you.



    pussy
    Last edited by 80SHOTS; December 4th, 2003 at 12:15 PM

  2. #2
    the medicine man
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    your structure needs a little work, your lines all all mixed length, ranging really long and pretty short.

    some wack wordplay, and some aiight,
    expand you vocabulary.

    aiight drop,
    not the best thought.


    peep 'racist' me and TAG collab, i'm putting it up soon

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  3. #3
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    I think double-0 seven was a little harsh on the structure coz it wasnt as bad as he made it sound but it wasnt really good either. Just elevate.
    As for your rhymescheme, I wasnt really feelin it much, you need to be a little more creative and add some multi's and you'll do a lot better.
    Overall I've seen worse but the whole topic I wasnt really feelin.
    keep droppin and practisin. 5/10
    LM
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  4. #4
    Gangsta One
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    Originally posted by double-0 seven
    your structure needs a little work, your lines all all mixed length, ranging really long and pretty short.

    some wack wordplay, and some aiight,
    expand you vocabulary.

    aiight drop,
    not the best thought.


    peep 'racist' me and TAG collab, i'm putting it up soon
    werd to wat he said, dawg. I think it was stl an a'ight piece tho...I give it a 5/10...

    Drop a word at me n E-Lyrical's mic, comin up soon...

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