Lies (Feat: Gene Pool)

[Mistral]

Posted in: Talon, Monstar, rule

Masta C:
Tired of being constantly lied to, cant trust cupid to have love guide through…
While I set aside dues, cause I got to work up things to make my pride new..
I cant see things right, every things blurry, I say one wrong thing it brings fights…
So my fists cling tight, a emotional bout that cant be controlled, cause my swings plight..
Feelings clashing like they were titans, while this rope around my neck tightens..
While the stress and depressing heighten, and I just wish I could make everyone enlightened..
But I cant cause I don’t stand proud, and as far as everybody knows this mans down..
Go on? No, I cant now, I guess when I reached the end I didn’t have things planned out…
Cause these lies, just eat me alive, brings tears to my eyes, with every tear a part of me dies…
You just in a disguise, I pointed it out with no surmise, and this bond is just at the demise…

Gene Pool:
corrupted visions, between the lines, and all I see is deceit and lies/
no longer have the time, to write rhymes, like life spinnin on a dime/
like that’s a crime, just wish death, cuz these bitches got me cockin tha 9/
aimin at who? Bitch, only u, an that’s juss all to true/
what life be like? Hell I’ll neva be missin you/
cuz I’ll always rememba those sorrowed days, cuz they neva go away, they just haunt/
stay till my death of old age, or maybe I should just decapitate my own brain/
or juss go all out insane! Eh yo! Get the fuck outta my pain! Till I ain’t got nuttin left ta say/
I juss go crazy, and can’t control the things, especially when I feel this way!/
Just all dazed, wake up from my moment of rage, and see u layin there/
bloodied, lifeless, and I asked if u were ok, my feelings bruised/
but not a word, suddenly takes my breath away, I’m so fucking confused/
what happened? I see the gatt in my hand, and I’m all bloodied to/
I feel so far apart, but I’m sittin 3 feet in front of u, fuck it, I’ll just put the gun on me to/

[Blackflags]

This Was A Decent Piece.....Multis Were Average.....Wordplay Was Pretty Good.....This Was An Overall Decent Piece....I Liked...Word....Good Drop


DoPeYz.

[MonStar]

ok nice drop yo...enjoyed the read...hears a breakdown...

master c: flow was good throughout...nice use of multies...vocab was good....structure was good, and so was the content....made for an enjoyable read....

gene pool: flow was good but fell off just a lil in a few spots in the middle, but for the most part it was good...vocab was pretty good...structure was pretty good also...content was pretty good too..overall it was a decent verse...

overall this was a pretty good drop, i felt like master c came with the better verse...anyways nice drop both of you...keep dropping..

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[Aisle Phive]

Decent Here...


Masta C You Had A Very Nice Rhyme Scheme.. But I Really Was Confused Throughout Most Of Your Verse. It Seemed Like I Was Missing Info.. Alot of It Was Pretty Random.. The Vocab Was Good. I Think You Should Shorten Your Lines.. Since Your Not Tellin A Story.. Overall I'll Give It A 6/10

Gene Pool.. I Didn't Understand Any Of What You Wrote. Lines Were Majorly Uneven. I See Potential But You Were Off Topic.. Focus On The Subject More Next Time And Fix your Structure. Vocab Was Decent. Overall I'll Give You A 4/10...

Keep Dropping.. And Peep My Open Mic Entitled "Don't Push Me..."

[Mistral]

Hey thanks for the feedback so far, Keep the feedback coming in, its much appreciated, thanks.

[RapidFire]

pretty decent piece....flow was solid throughout...first kat had better rhymes and multis but both were about even as far as the content goes...2nd kat seemed a little more aggressive though...

overall a decent piece but could use a lot of work if it was meant to be anything above average...not bad though

peace

[Mistral]

Hey thanks for the feedback so far, keep the feedback coming in, its much appreciated, thanks.

[E C C O]

eh yo

quite liked the peice felt the flow really well....could do with makeing the verses a little less choppy because some times throughout both verses i felt it was a litle hard to understand....

overall liked it though .......good peice.....

[Auspicious]

Ight Collab Here Guys..
It Wasn't Two Sided.. Meaning
Gene Pools Fell From Masta C's And
Didn't Posess Its Own Style, Which
Wouldn't Make Tha Collab All That Dope
But Nice Piece Here

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[Mistral]

hey thanks for the feedback so far, keep the feedback coming in, its much appreciated, thanks.

[Ken Dawg]

This piece was wack..wack in a good way..it was all decent..you get two thumbs up..peace out aight

[Red Wun]

Ay wuzup. Dis was a nice drop. Nice wordplay good subject. Keep it up

[FormulaMC]

Pretty Good collab here, holdin CV down well. Feedback by verses.

Masta C:
Ya verse was good man. Flow made it strong, content made it stronger. Vocab was good, Multi's were great. You had the more tender verse, as Gene Pool was the agressor.

Bar:

Cause these lies, just eat me alive, brings tears to my eyes, with every tear a part of me dies…
You just in a disguise, I pointed it out with no surmise, and this bond is just at the demise…
^^^ Real nice here, Multi's made it stand-out.

Gene Pool:

Like Auspicious said, you fell off from Masta's verse. Not big time, but your's was like a step-down. I liked the agression tho, made the read pretty good. Flow was ok, sketchy in some parts. Multi's were decent, Vocab was standard. Not a bad verse, jus that this collab woulda been dope if you would've stayed on Masta's level.

Bar:

what happened? I see the gatt in my hand, and I’m all bloodied to/
I feel so far apart, but I’m sittin 3 feet in front of u, fuck it, I’ll just put the gun on me to
^^ Real nice. Created the image of sorrow and confusion that you killed "her". . . if that's what you were tryna get across.

Overall: Was feelin this drop. Wasn't the best in the world, but it was good. Gene, for future collabs, work on maintaining that level with your partner, so the content and everything remains constant throughout.

-Formula.

** Feedback for my new drop "Emergency" is welcome. **

[Mistral]

Hey thanks for the feedback so far, keep the feedback coming in, its much appreciated, thanks.

[Gene Pool]

yo thanx for all the feedback peeps and to answer ur sort of question formula I was tryin to do what u said. and also I myself know that my verse is pretty sloppy but I wrote mine in like less then half an hour and I wasn't really payin full attention to it. if u wanna read a piece where me and masta C collab really well then check out "High Times (feat. Masta C)" and "High Times *The Sequel* (feat. Masta C)" cuz I think those are our 2 best pieces together. and thanx again peeps for the feedback keep it comin. muchly appreciated. peace.