aight 10 lines norm rules all votes must be explained
diverse your up
DiverseSyndicate
V.A. $lim
aight 10 lines norm rules all votes must be explained
diverse your up
no show does that mean I won .................................................. ......................
virginia slim, diverses-hymns will curse-ya-kin, send you spirilin downwards cause i dispersed-with-in//
hit-you-with-heat, rip-you-in-three, put tha slices in my oven till im fixin-to-eat, cause i strike like an egg-beater, mixin-emcees//
my verse could make you leak-from-tha-brain, now you speakin-insane, took away your intelligents, now your weak-and-your-lame//
i know you, you was smokin menthols, while you was puffin, i rendered your verse useless due-to-this install//
some small program, it turns ya verse from a battle to a slow-jam, i left you withered like a smoked-ham, u thought this was a joke-man.
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DiverseSyndicate
ic ur getting better!
good luck to V.A. $lim~!hit-you-with-heat, rip-you-in-three, put tha slices in my oven till im fixin-to-eat, cause i strike like an egg-beater, mixin-emcees//
^ clever multis! LoL
~OnE!~
QueenStyle
uppin^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^ ^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^ ^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^
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nice rap......................
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stop freepostin ya fuckin herb, too many people are freepostin and shit,one of the mods need to do somethin bout that.uppin this battle.~1~
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aight sorry it took so long last I checked you didnt post and this is the first time I have been on today so mine will be up in a few and that was a good verse I know I cant beat it but I need feedback so I can know how to up my skill so I will try anyways
can someone tell me why this bitch wants to freestyle fight me
when everyone knows his keystyle is biting
diverse I heard your a faggot sittin at home masturbating dudes
while I'm on this verse masticating you (look up masticate)
this bitch is an egg beater that beats off MC's
and cant make money from rappin so he makes it on his knees
before I kill him I will have "fun first" so diverse get on your knees and wait for my "cum squirts"
if you tell me no then youll hear my "guns burst" while I have ya momma screamin my "sons hurt"
it'll stop the way your "lungs work" then you'll be ridin in some"ones hurst"
your done now cause I just burried you under "some dirt"
Decent battle here.....breakdown
Punches: DS
personals: VA
Multi's: DS
Wordplay: None
Metas: DS
Flow: VA
Vote = DS
His punches just hit harder....VA I was wit u up until the last couple of lines
hit my battle up against lyrical cyanide
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/show...threadid=83004
hit-you-with-heat, rip-you-in-three, put tha slices in my oven till im fixin-to-eat, cause i strike like an egg-beater, mixin-emcees//
LMAO egg beater?
witf you is crazy lol but i enjoyed that line
before I kill him I will have "fun first" so diverse get on your knees and wait for my "cum squirts"
if you tell me no then youll hear my "guns burst" while I have ya momma screamin my "sons hurt"
^ lmfao
that was weird but cum lines as we all kno have been played out since 92
but it was still funny
anyways overall im gonna go with the creativity and that came from ds
can yall break it down for me more so that I know what I have to work on and what really is good and bad cause I'm really new to this and like those last lines I thought were my best cause the multi's and the in line's but I guess that I am thinking that cause I know how hard they were for me to think up .
just looking for some advice and help thanks
Ds got dis, straight woop ass lololol
punches and everything went to Ds
vote = ds
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vs i think that its mainly the wors you use
there simple words maybe pick up a thesaurus or sit n think what other word means the same thing?
that might help you out some you kno? example:
before I kill him I will have
PRIOR to the kill
or something i dunno i mean look at my record lol but im just trying to help do me a favor and look at my battle wit hot ice ( its ridicoulous and im sorry to waste your tyme) same with DS peep as well please
aight everyone upping this shit for some more votes .................................................. ...............
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