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Born To Kill
JBrookz
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Checkin in, my man...
Good luck to ya.
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Ya sunk like Titanic, <---that's played more than ya porn password...
So I'll smash tha Cristal over ya head, cuz I christen thee an herb.
Don't know ya, but heard ya so affectionate after beatings, ya squirt...
They say he holds his ground, after his dick's been knocked in tha dirt.
And that's all the pussy ya gettin, so ta tell tha truth, I'm behooved...
Brookz is gonna finally get blown, after he has a couple of ribs removed.
Kid get's flattened alot, like now, so he opened a pizzeria...
And he's depressed so he tried a pick me up, but got a hernia.
Ya overpower subliminal messaging, cuz it's clear ya suck...
Even Cher could slap ya inta orbit, and declare ya moonstruck.
You'll just come played out, probably ghostwritten at that...
Using tha skills of another, not making ME but THEM look bad.
Born spits "comes out" more [half-assed] than [siamese twins] during "labour"/
Servin him more slugs than Chinese food waiters/
Like "Kleptomaniacs" next to [dope dealers] it's a fact/
His faggit ass can't stop "feeling on another man's [sack]"/
Fuck his eight to five, him puttin out effort to win this brawl is/
Nut'n new....jes him "workin to get merked like always"/
Like grafitti on documents Born getting signed is evil and fatal/
That's jes defacing the records like putting "Kelis on a label/ (ponder on those 2 lines)
Aint a fight...shit's more like chess when I'm droppin these bombs/
I'm putting dis bitch back in his place like he's one of my pawns/ (think bout it)
Like prostitute donors givin brains this man just keep suckin/
That shit was ass......hmmmmm....someone's been butt fuckin/
ppl wit skill wud get da lines...jes hope da rest of u really read dis shit
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good luck wit ya verse B
ok...
born - some creative wordplay, nice use of the Cher "moonstruck" LOL hope these younger cats will get that one... the creativity was the best factor, the punches were eh, but the wordplay made up for it
Jbrooks - structure hurts the eyes... change the way you post ya verses, you're killin ya own flow with that shit looks like html attempts, punches were basic, elevate
not a great battle, but born gets this one. peace
^^^ i always write ma shit 2 beats homie....i know dat shit flows...w/e.....i hope u aint votin cuz he got over 100+ posts.....cuz dat wud b jes wack...
uppin this battle
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JBrookz took this battle easily punches punches punches punches punches punches. Whoever said it aint flow is an idiot. it flowed well enough to take this battle, i'mma punchline fan and Born didn't have any.......or any worth remembering. JBrookz won this battle easily to me, now go somewhere and do a dance or something.
V/Born
Alright battle.......came with a few good punches........no extreme filler....came decent....i can see ur improving
J....alot of filler, nothing really direct....wasnt feelin it.......elevate
Thanks for the votes, gentlemen...
Ya'll vote, drop links, all that regular shit...
Much appreciated.
Peace
Flow: Tie
Punch: BTK
Meta: J
Structure: BTK
Personal: Blah
Vote: Born
this battle was decent both had decent punchs
J fix your structre
you got potential
Uppin...
Got the proverbial KO...
Now let's wrap it up with the last 2.
Throw this way...
I'll vote on yours in return, blah, blah, blah.
Peace
This was fuckin obvious that Born won..
I was feelin ya opener born that shit was mad ill.. haha had me laughin.. the rest of ur verse was consistently nice.. good use of wordplay and punches.. personals were average but hes a new member so there aint much to get on him.. nice verse
Brookz your structure had my eyes killing.. your punchs were played and not even that complex.. you got the essentials now just work on that shit man..
Overall - Born
i can't vote yet.. but good ish from both...check me out
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Uppin for more votes!!!
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