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Last edited by Illus'; November 23rd, 2008 at 03:01 PM
Whoa almost fell...at the buttom...
Uppin....critique you lazy bums....
Laters...
i liked it, good flow stucture and wordplay, overall i would say it is one of teh better mics i read.keep it up
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4 fithcame hard as hell his structure lacked by site standards but i liked myself and the words usage was agressive yet impressive
i enjoyed the verse as a whole.
struct also lacked minorly but lyrics did not a lil soft but at the same time very raw in delivery imadry and floetics.
over all this wasnt theillest but both lyricist were most impressive and complimentory to one another
a good track
to love something,is to die for it ,if you do, your a martyr , but these days music is morbid, false carters ..prohet's for prophet no lie, look how our last martyr was crucified. to put it in it symplicity, you aint true...you wouldnt sacrifice a few dollars for authenticity..
Sweet. Good flow all around. Some of your lyrics seemed to come out of nowhere, but not in a bad way. Could be a rising star here.
Liked it, but don't put it in parapragh form like that. Makes it hard to read. There is real talent here though. Keep up.
Seperate the lines in first verse.
Combustion of vocab n witty lines..
Came toghether quite nicely..
Ok drop.
Witty Unpredicatable Talent And Natural Game
My pokemon brings all the nerds to the yard, and there like "Do you wanna trade cards?" Damn Right lets trade some cards, I'll trade you, but not my charizard.
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i like the first dudes verse better, he had nice multies and a good delivery, on the other hand, the other one had a good flow and a good structure 2 make up for spitter1..so overall combined, this was pritty nice..8.5/10
Much appreciated......
Uppin
both had some ok parts in thier verse...but both lacked abit.....4, had a niuce way with words..but lost me in places with the structure....and i dont mean cos its in paragraph.....bio....thought your lines fell short a bit and abrupt in places... also you didnt show the vocab as much....but on the whole as a collab it was ok...nuthin special but nuthin shit....pZ
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ure structure 'did' lack a lil, but the flow were still there. Complexity had some blanks here an there, sortta got lost in it a bit.......but overall, i liked reading it....
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Yeah I kinda did Lack vocab....
which I usually don't lack...
Ty for critique...
Laters...
tthe first verse was hot as fuck nice work
I liked this though i agree that the structure was off and certain parts could have had a bit stronger vocab. Overall, this was a good read, nice piece of work you guys. Keep writing.
damn...nice drop to both of u....looks like 4 five still got it...lol....just fix ur structure and even out ur barz like Bio's and ur shit will be most definitely dope.....Bio had the structure in this though without a doubt...and a smooth flow....but 45 had an aggressive flow with sick multis and vocabulary....good work from u both....keep up the good work fam...
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