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    Camp Kill Yourself Season 3

    Camp Kill Yourself Season 3

    Camp Is Reopen For Killing....

    Johnny 6 Feet-

    The gun's a simple instrument, but what a chorus it makes
    Shocks with shells, a listener is rewarded with shakes
    And the players of this music earn merits at early ages
    Throw salutes to their instructors, and then murder the playlist
    Of course the directors of this show could be classed as puppeteer's
    Behind the scene's, dressing their actors, then stand above the fear
    Pulling strings, writing the dialogue, thinking 'I am God'
    Exchanging chemicals to sooth and then they try and rob
    The dance numbers include poses; pyramid form of cadavers
    And the audience watches, milky-eyed, listen for their laughter
    This productions had a long run, and now comes the grand revival
    The camp fires are burning brightly during dialogue recitals
    So cough down your favorite drug and enlist into the cast
    Run your flag up to mark your territory and hold it until the last
    All the world's a stage, watch the saga get told
    ...Watch the drama unfold

    at Camp Kill Yourself

    Baron P. Mortuss-

    Welcome to the camp, hold onto your drum
    & beat it slow- hard hit the head of this scum
    let him feel the music- abuse his tunic- secondly,
    use it to choke him till he bleeds out obscenities
    did I mention that we, provide all instruments see
    we carefully choose out stock of humans so homily
    come with me- use the tongue to scrape the sawdust
    ties her- make her scream out Rock songs so flawless
    then headless- the slight pop is refreshing to my ears
    & my peers throw salt on wounds- then it appears
    that you hear the best tenors- so natural & emotive
    in this camp we’ll teach you music, keys & motifs
    stay with me I want you to clearly know this
    your but another- user used to be a part of our motive
    Now use that rope as a pendant- it looks so pretty
    your erratic dance fits neatly…in
    The music video of
    Camp Kill yourself part 3

    Engivale-

    I can't will myself to stay at Camp Kill Yourself,
    These familiar welts raise up on my skin's dead vanilla cells
    The audience laughs as the body is smashed -
    It's the way we feed --- take what we need so the colony lasts...
    The drugs are a way to escape the mess we've created,
    Unless we're sedated we get depressed and confess that we made it...
    This isn't my dream, this is torture hidden between
    A rhythm of screams and a instrument's strings,
    Are we justifying dying by giving the means?
    The pain would be brief but I cut the same vein in relief,
    And gain the release from these razorblades stained when I bleed,
    I'm no longer accused of being abusive to people,
    I put down the knife, I've found I like using the needle...
    I prick and I stick and I wish I could sort through,
    Resort to another scab and stab it with a corkscrew...
    Fuck water, we're using blood to fill the wells,
    "I won't drink it!"
    "You will or else!"
    I think it's time to put you and your spouse in.....
    Camp Kill Yourself...



    Last edited by P. Mortuus; August 15th, 2008 at 02:39 AM
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    Re: Camp Kill Yourself Season 3

    Hot damn

    i really haven't the time to break up each mans part but it was dope, from start to finish, which i loved he finish i felt it flowed so sweetly, it had a plot with beautiful imagery, with spectacular use of vocabulary, this is some inspirational shit right here.

    i'm going to nom it.

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    Re: Camp Kill Yourself Season 3

    Wow, okay heres the breakdown

    Nyce-
    This was the perfect into for this piece, it felt like you were a camp director taking me through and introducing me to everything. The imagery was great and your vocab was great for this piece, very dark and rigid. I saw a grammatic error somewhere but that was about it. Great way to start off the piece

    Johnny-
    One of the longest metaphores i have ever seen you pull off, murder described through a camp play sort of theme for some reason fits my sensibility perfect. You never really dissapoint in your writting, your a great story teller and you understand how to use litterary techniques. This piece is going Up.

    Baron-
    You really beat the shit out of this piece, in a good way. Your position in the piece is perfect because it's right where the story should pick up momentum toward the climax. The flow was flawless and the imagery was very strong. Not alot of people can run off every line and make it work but you do and it's a show of your obvious talents.

    Engivale-
    Who else better to end the piece then you. You wound the topic down and left the piece with closure. The metaphores and suck were great as always
    I'm no longer accused of being abusive to people,
    I put down the knife, I've found I like using the needle...
    I prick and I stick and I wish I could sort through,
    Resort to another scab and stab it with a corkscrew...
    Fuck water, we're using blood to fill the wells,
    "I won't drink it!"
    "You will or else!"
    I think it's time to put you and your spouse in.....
    Camp Kill Yourself...
    I loved this part, it flowed great and every line was worth reading in and of it's self. I could'nt have thought of a better way to end this

    Great job guys, I hope this get good feed and u got my Nom.
    Hit up me and Baron's piece
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    Re: Camp Kill Yourself Season 3

    Thanks for the feed and yeah it did get nom'd aiming for more.
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    damn son, this wuz reall tite. i like the topc and wordplay frum erbody adnt the setup is good. the concepts of each verse was real signifcant in each way.
    id say hall of fame peice rite here.
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    Re: Camp Kill Yourself Season 3

    Well after taking my time and trying to gather my thoughts as to what i really thought of the piece drop by some of the known writers of the site...

    ...i had to read it again just to make sure that i read and understood everything perfectly. This piece was far beyond thoughtout, each member came with their own style, and worked it to the point that all the verses flowed together through the imagry, and emotion. Highly impressed by the fact that i didn't even see this in the OM section of RB and dissappointed that i wasn't able to read the 1st 2 Season of the collab before i read this but anyway, seeing as this is a collab im choosing not to breakdown verse for verse and member for member cuz the feed would be ridiculously long and who and the hell would read it LOL but anyway i was really loving the imagry, the emotion, im a fan of vocabulary and it was decent, but what i liked the most of the take on the topic for the story telling...i just wanna say PROPS on THE COLLAB.

    Really enjoyed reading this piece...

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    Seeded in a ghetto, smokin cigarellos
    Stress oceans try to drown me
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    Mic in my plam like the trident in the hand of Poseidon

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    Re: Camp Kill Yourself Season 3

    I nominated season one, and I nominated season two.. I'll leave season three to the other readers.. because,

    I felt that Nyce had a few MINOR gramatical errors in his verse.. where it had a sentence that didn't have that absolute wording to it for it's PURE SENSE of sound. But other then that, it was a dope read. All of you had your own stories to Camp Kill Yourself. And it ended in complete originality and creativity. The imagery of it all was cool, you all had a nice enough bit of pieces in the details that came across visual and vividly descripted. Emotion was horrorfying.. enough said. Flow of it all was pretty cool, and the piece was dope. Story was cool. Keep writing.

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    Re: Camp Kill Yourself Season 3

    word thanks for the feed dudes.
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    Re: Camp Kill Yourself Season 3

    oh this is what i was supposed to write a verse for? oops.
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    Re: Camp Kill Yourself Season 3

    Quote Originally Posted by Daz View Post
    oh this is what i was supposed to write a verse for? oops.
    you can leave some feed or key up some shit and let me add it and with more feed..........they'll see what you wrote.
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    Re: Camp Kill Yourself Season 3

    I'ma read this again and leave an in depth feed.....cause its kinda long.
    I'ma get back to this though.

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    ^we will be waiting.
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    Re: Camp Kill Yourself Season 3

    damn that's long but I'll edit wit feed ina bit.

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    Re: Camp Kill Yourself Season 3

    wowww..this was amazing.

    The whole thingg was well put togetherr..everything was on point. I like going through the OM's an readin stuff you guys usually put outt..but all of you guys rolled in one is insane..I was impressed with everything. N everyone had a sick verse..an Engivale killed it in the end.. good job guys

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