Off The Top

[Mackin']

I'm a king, when I step into the ring your finished
I'm a business man grown from grown man business
Skep is in this, elite when I get on the mic and speak
It's like I got stinky toes, cause ya'll smell defeat
I'll eat an emcee alive, quick and fast cause
I'm ahead of my time, I was born before my dad was
I heard these cats bite, these situations are always fishy
I undertand p, but the question always is diddy
Get the wordplay, “No” is what the herbs say
Roll you into a blunt and burn you the herb way
I’m a real pimp G, I get that pussy you fakers
I’m a master, but for ya’ll at the end just add the bator
Smack a hater, hot so I walk the sun for fun
And I got that Terror Squad like I’m Big Pun
Son, the top spot in hip hop is what I seek
Lyrics hit so hard, without production I give ya’ll the beat

[Mackin']

http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=327637
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=327989

[Sidewinder]

Eh homie i dun think dis wuz dat good, i meen a lot of ur conceptz iz played, like da "defeat" line is olda den shit.Lotsa ur werdplay is old, nothin relly creative nah mean. Keep practisin tho and it will get better. Stay up

[vocabz]

Sorry to say this, man... This piece does need some work.. than again... It was just some shit off the top.. No hate.. The flow was definitely on the right track... Yo this right here was nice..

Smack a hater, hot so I walk the sun for fun
And I got that Terror Squad like I’m Big Pun

A few other things I can quote, too...Not much but... I could probably throw down some more. Right now I just dont got the time.. It looks as if it'd sound much better through an audio... Ever run into those types of pieces?.. You did decent work, dawg.. Haven't seen much from ya.. You should start droppin' more often.. Uplift.. You feel me?

[Masahiko.]

ok, you atleast tempted on some wordplay, which means you have the bare roots of what you need to become successful, which is good. So take it and expand on that, I see a lot of potential in everything you said, but what you need to focus on is elevating the areas to the maximum. No doubt you have the skeleton of a great lyricist you just need to get the muscle and the skin and your all set.

[Mackin']

lol.. i never write.. so i dont know what concepts are played or what isn't.. as you can tell from this.. thanks for the feed.. it was just a quick verse

[Paperback]

Word` Up`
As long as you are satisfied with your style you don't need to change anything in your key`
You said you don't write and you are not worried about concepts and I assume you can careless about imagery and contents too,
I actually thought this had a fun simple wordplay going on`
Once again as long as your cool with it`
Keep on having fun with it`
Peace`

http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=328001

[robrathburn]

yo, it aight off the top. forget guys saying its played out and ish. like noone ever rhymed crystal and pist-al 4.000.0000 times.

i got much more respect for quick 65% verses than for 95% verses that some cat spent six weeks rewriting. its like if it took that long what the f did you start with? your name on the page?

keep writing homey