Lost Love

[Sir Skiddz SoPhrenic]

Baby, when I look in your eyes, I see a goddess in Disguise
Took so long to realize, without you im done, no surprise
that Without me, your still a desire to any pair of eyes
I get off a city high, when my caramel smiles like the sunrise
We were perfect for each other, yet imperfect individuals
Focused much more on our love, kept the fighting to a minimal
Yet men will stay men, and women will always be worried
And given oppurtunity enough, men will stray off in a hurry
And I'll deny it to my death, Deny till im blue in the face
And I knew from when you wept, that YOU knew that wasnt the case
I wasn't telling the truth, and you knew that I broke our bond
But you never realize you really lost love... until it's gone..

Baby I've been miserable, desperate, Im beginning to plea
For a second chance, just like old times, baby just you and me
A straight line to your heart, not a love triangle in our minds
I've completely changed, just look at the surprises you'll find
I cook and clean now, I can maintain myself, but a piece is missing
I go to sleep now, no cuddling, none of our good night kissing
that lets me know that even if I dont wake up, I died loving you
you may not realize, but everything I say is all truth..
I've been getting myself controlled, my lifes still not together
because your the piece in my heart, that'll make it all better

Baby please let me in, I havent had a home in a few weeks
You told me you couldn't love me, look at the harsh words that you speak
But Im persistent, I'll stay out on your doorstep until you let me in
You have no idea in the past few months of the places I've been
there were back alleys, crack spots, and heroin addicts
I guess its safe to say, I've picked up a few of their habits
But it doesn't control me darling, I know our love burns anew
You've got a new man now, Gee, whats your sorry excuse
That you have another man, and got mad one time I cheated
I haven't let our love go, but now its in my heart seething,
Leaving, i guess I dont need you I have a new girlfiend, too
She's small but shiny, and in my favorite hue of blue
and she never lets me down, and doesn't ever leave my side
and she joins me when im with other women, down for the ride
Heh, you dont even know, what you really have lost
Dont let me in Bitch, I NOW see all the pain you have caused
But I dont need you really, all I need is to get high
Higher than the high love reaches for in the sky..
So im leaving now baby, im gonna go out and smoke
under the door suddenly, slides in a note

Look its been a few minutes you've had at me at the door
Just wanted to let you know that its only you that i've adored
But i had to let go, see there were ways you damaged me
And the months that followed were not anguish free
But now I see the worse has happened, you love drugs at all costs
We can't rekindle the magic, now our love's truly been lost
I bare your seed now, the only remembrance I have of our love
I wanted you back in my life, but you lost our love to your drugs
So im leaving forever, and im takin our baby with me
Start over in a new city, and try to erase all the painful memories
You were a good man, and now i see what is the cost
of a man who'd give anything up when his love is lost


I know its too long for retards to read but hopefully a few of you will enjoy it.
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/show...67#post5404067
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/show...70#post5404070

[Sir Skiddz SoPhrenic]

wow fuck open mic.. close this shit..i dont even want none of your fucking feedback

[Tragedian.]

This was so...emotional..lol...very nice...it flowed very nicely and had a very smooth read, vocab was pretty good, every word went well with the next, you really had me intrested just with the way you started the piece alone, the main thing that stood out was your emotion, I felt it the most, very good piece...keep up man.

[Baxter D. Wall]

I hate druggies. They are the worst.


zomg Skiddddzzzzzz. . .


anyways, this kind of had that "You Never Know" feel goin' on. . it was pretty nice. . except either you didn't elude to drugs enough in the beginning, or i'm retarded. . cuz I didn't realize dude was a crackhead the whole time until the end. .


but me seeing this makes me want to start writing again. . I love you Skiddz.


If I had a vagi, you'd have my baby.

xoxoxoxooxox


btw, it was an overall nice experience, simple but elaborate.

[mr_puti]

so hostile lol but nah i felt this shiit n plus io like ur pic there of that chick lol so u good wit me

[f-gee]

you'l soon come to realise that RB doesnt reply on anything over 10 lines and the better it is the less replies it gets.

i wasnt planning to read this but ended up doing so

not wholly original in plot, but liked how you added the twist of her wanting him back when it was too late

rhymes were solid, more multies would speed the pace up, somethin to keep in mind

there were back alleys, crack spots, and heroin addicts
I guess its safe to say, I've picked up a few of their habits
But it doesn't control me darling, I know our love burns anew
You've got a new man now, Gee, whats your sorry excuse
That you have another man, and got mad one time I cheated
I haven't let our love go, but now its in my heart seething,
Leaving, i guess I dont need you I have a new girlfiend, too
She's small but shiny, and in my favorite hue of blue
and she never lets me down, and doesn't ever leave my side
and she joins me when im with other women, down for the ride

best part for me

possibly coulda shortened this verse up, in fact the first segment coulda maybe been dropped and the reader would still have got the jist of it all without losing any impact

keep on it, reply n Counter Productive if you would