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    ..Realitys Challenging..

    It feels like tha worlds weight is crashin down
    i sit in bliss and listen to that everlastin sound
    my life is like an overload,my brain is passin out
    i see my self start to loose direction,confused and guessin
    sometimes i hope im fit to raise an adolescent
    give him praise for days and hand him presents
    my one star that sits on half moon crescents
    and thats my blessin,aside from my baby girl
    she keeps my nights bright and clears my hazey world
    i keep my family close like im fiendin for a dose
    my sons got crazy curls,too young to get faded
    im liked by most,but im close to bein hated
    if you didnt understand what im sayin,let me reiterate it
    inhale gasses till im high then i swerve
    life passes you by if you dont try,in a blur
    memories where no one envys me,i prefer


    --everyday i pray we can make it
    i stand tall when i feel i should fall and start shakin
    dont know where im goin i feel naked
    feels like im close to bein frozen and breakin
    when im smokin im bakin--



    my baby missed a month,when im pissed i punch
    stress consumes my whole being,gettin blitzed and drunk
    used to get dissed at lunch,until i found a way to vent
    as i send my sound away im spent,i found a way to pay my rent
    use my pen to send a message,then blend in aggression
    i bend tha lesson and ive been corrected,so just spin the record
    ive been fucked over by many bitches,tricks w/ fake kisses
    bitches that wanna be my mistress,cook,clean,and do tha dishes
    there vicious spittin fake game,talkin shit they bring up your name
    she got no job and no money,and your to blame
    you cant cure tha game,its tha deadliest disease,itll eat away your teeth
    snort your pride and sneeze,its hard to stay alive with ease
    collapse to your knees and pray,please,save me


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    Re: ..Realitys Challenging..

    up......


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    up........


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    Re: ..Realitys Challenging..

    uppin.........stop sleepin people


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    Re: ..Realitys Challenging..

    what tha fuck is with everybody sleepin it up in here???wake up!!


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    Re: ..Realitys Challenging..

    Have you been replying to other peoples pieces? If not, you should... maybe you will get feedback intsead of upping your piece 4 times in a row.
    Rappers sound the same man, found 1 game plan & ran through it
    They all got that Geico flow.. Cause even a cave man can do it

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    yea i reply...here and there seeing as im at work....i reply too peoples pieces...everyone has there own little group of people they congregate with..and therefore more than anything they reply to each others pieces and no one elses.....it aint like it used to be on this site....and instead of you replying you just left you opinion on how to get replys...why not leave feedback seeing as your already in my thread...either way.....i could reply to everybodies piece and i wouldnt get but a few replys...and its from people i know on tha site from way back....i only up as much as people sleep and i have this piece on here for about two weeks...either way..i know what your sayin...~1`


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    Re: ..Realitys Challenging..

    one last up people...need some critique...this piece was orignaly recorded but i had to drop tha lyrics for OM.


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    up.........


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    ok i like da drop, it was structured out nicely nd u had a good flow, i have 2 da first verse was way better den da 2nd one, on da 2nd one u just seemed 2 b rushin it 2 much nd u couldve closed alot better. i could tell dat it was recorded just by da way it flowed, u started real hot but u seemed 2 fizzle out which is understandable cus its hard 2 stay consistantly hot on such a long piece, its a hot piece but i couldve been a classic one. 8.5/10

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    Re: ..Realitys Challenging..

    thnks.....up..


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    Re: ..Realitys Challenging..

    This was a aiightish piece...the overall concept was meh....life pieces are done so much...but you interpreted your own style into it...the start of it was all that well and seem to go back and forth....but as you began the second verse is where the multi's and flow really picked up only to fall back down again...when writing try to keep your flow consistant and pick up on rhyming syllabes that you mave have skipped...other than that this was a aiight read...keep it up...and RTF...pls...

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    Re: ..Realitys Challenging..

    hahahaha..thnks...yea this piece wasnt my best..but best or not critique is welcome..regardless of how accurate it is.~1~


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    Re: ..Realitys Challenging..

    This piece really caught my eye. I don't know maybe it's because I can easily relate to most of it. I haven't peeped much yet, but this... This was dope to me. You should turn this audio. If you have a mic? If I run into anymore pieces of yours, I'll leave feedbacks on them. Once again, this was dope to me.

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