Raper's Caper- Baron, Engivale, Truth, Twix & Forum

[P. Mortuus]

File:Raper's Caper

1st-Baron
2nd-Engivale
3rd-Forum
4th-Twixn
5th-Truth
6th- Malice.

Lust can blind a man into a beast, 
a beast which will go at any length,
to fulfil it’s hunger….

Stripped standing strong among the rubbish tips
slowly slipped so I grabbed her arms & gripped
I squeezed & she fell weak on her knees, screamed
Urine streams, an oral enema means to demean
Captivating eyes afraid, open up & raid, never obeyed
I sprayed mace, bondage provided by her shoe lace
Her worse nightmare, no cape, no bats I pull her plats
Stats in the making, death & rape, I slip off her slacks
Spike insertion, hyped perversion & hiked coercion
Dead, blood used as a lotion spread, blight a hoyden
Twisted events left her with dents, I taped a version
Final corrosion she’s better now, acidified with poison

I cut and I slice
From What I entice
what’s right is lust fights
from recitin' my rights...
Fifth Amendment, Don't have to Talk
Sick Impediment to graph with chalk...
I don't leave em alive...
No stories...
No one sees to describe
how I kill these four forties...
Kill whores for these...
Free who survive...
Glee to arrive at the first speed bump;
you get caught, not if you pre dump...
Get rid of three limbs-
Chop em and Chisel Off em' bone marrow-
And narrow the chance of wheat thins...
And by that I mean a Life sentence...
How?
It's New Slang, from the few deranged
who need Repentance...
Deceit's what's confinement is made for...
Rape is just crime that's for time to trade toward...




Stripped standing strong among the rubbish tips death defying glimpse
My move is made using moons shade to guide the brave night's days
pursuing her gift as I betray bliss & eagerness manoeuvres swift
Thoughts perverted envisioning the insertion upon her bodies decay
Upon introduction to mace I slugged her face & shattered her lips
I began to strangle her mangled limbs as my erection grows harder
Her eyes begged, I parted her legs penetrating between the muscles grip
She lies stiff as her life's grip goes farther she's quickly becoming a martyr
The blood oozed from her mouth was good news as south heads my departure
task completed swift as a quail as I inhale B4 deaths wretched smell starts up

I Check the ropes, she’s bound tight...
muffled screams create the symphony of the night...
I rip her shirt steadily and precise.., sucking n licking
this is where the mark shall be, excitement trickling
her body feels tight with tension ecstasy rushes in sections
Shhh baby no need to fight... darkness's invention
I cut a wide opening... I can see her warm blood cascades...
as the look from her eyes reveals fear as she cries out n' hope fades
I wipe using my jacket, withdrawing the dry blade...
my hands grip slimy entrails pulling them free...
... as I move her dissected track intricately...
recreating the bibles words into brand news sins, created delicately.
Murder from jealousy... I write the message with her innards...
I’ve come to earth from hell... to put shame to all sinners


Blood on the floor, I’m slipping
ruthless ripping has me aroused, am I tripping?
no, I just set out do what I wanted to
to see that her head was bloody, try to subdue
these voices telling me that this is what I want
the first girl now my aunt? Should I flaunt
the fact I took away their lives or act nonchalant?
In the middle of thoughts I felt a strong urge
bubbling feeling emerges I hear give the bitch what she deserves
how could this be? I feel lust for the flesh of my grandfathers seed
I couldn't stop myself and after pulling her pants down
I pleasured myself for hours packed my bags and left town

Scorn in directions, corress her worn interception
Flesh torn into sections, to me such joy is a blessing
A known professionist, muffled screams, seem trifling soothing
As now her heart leaks out to me, forgot the knife was protruding
So fixated on death, dialated eyes, show the scarcity of light
Detaining her health, surprised how her complexion faded with life
Deranged in the sight, tied to the radiator, pulsing to meet
Corrosive to meat, burns and bruises, marks repulsive and beat
Central air, pouring down, cool steel, supposively seethed
Mixture of moisture hot and cold, tissue's emplosion of heat
Shallow leaks of fluids arise, seems the flows are descrete
Viens dry within demise, she'll forever soak in her sleep

The identity of the man that committed these
unthinkable crimes was never discovered.

A few crimes after the last, were said to have been
done by the same seemingly faceless man.

No one saw him come in, no one saw him go out.

Although his victims were raped;
no traceable hair or semen samples were found.

We can only hope that these crime caught up to the monster,
but chances are the man, the myth and the monster will live on...forever

[P. Mortuus]

http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=325329
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/show...65#post5481865

[Pious]

This is omerta. Good to see this is what i signed up for haha. I thought the storyline was excellent and each person's verse flowed into the other's nicely. The only thing I could suggest is because it is a fairly long piece - to try to incorporate more of the 5 senses into it. this usually works to immerse the reader in imagery...

I noticed alot of you like to rhyme off fairly big words and then rhyme them again as an internal. this is good because it shows that you have a good writing ability, but at the same time you're setting yourself up to have an overly-repetitive structure which can detract from interest in the piece.

Overall though I loved the story and how the verses linked. Great ending also. I'm excited for future collabs. peace.

[P. Mortuus]

thanks

Malice's vers has been added in now.

[Truth Iscariot]

thanks

Malice's verse has been added in now.

thats good to know

[Forum]

This turned out doper then I thought.......Good to see it up finally..

[Truth Iscariot]

told oyu as soon as i got my internet on it would get finished and the day i had it on we did it

[sILLable]

wow....i enjoyed this piece very much...all tha verse flowed very nicely...they all had excellent wordplay and vocab....imagery was def on point.....its rare i read any piece from the people who wrote this that isnt up to speed..and well..ill....i liked tha concept...theres always a good bit of complexity in yalls pieces......everything about this collab was ill....i felt all the verses were on point..they all went together very smoothly...no one was off..and yall all had verse that tied in wiht each others..no one trailed off...it was a beautiful collab and i hope to see more from all of you..or perhaps collab with some of you my self...keep droppin tha hottness for sure....~1`

[Twixn...]

hahah...

i thought this fell behind like my schoolwork.

[Truth Iscariot]

hahah...

i thought this fell behind like my schoolwork.

i'm just glad it was put up its a beuty thats the best verse i've wrote in like a month

[Engivale]

God... how long ago did I write that for you, man? LoL.

[P. Mortuus]

Long ago lol.

[Truth Iscariot]

rise

[RiZe]

When i seen so many names on it , i though it might have been whack , but ya'll pulled it together real nice , and ur flows went good together , good shit cuzz

[P. Mortuus]

Thanks.