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    IE: River Runs Through Me

    I've searched the
    outter expansions
    of the miniature
    thing that I've
    called love and
    I've come up
    empty-handed just
    a bit too much
    for my comfort.


    enter the jungle...

    bleeding, torn into
    pieces that words
    couldn't mend. . .
    i've fallen victim
    to emotions that
    would be a little
    too much to describe
    in words, looks, or
    thoughts.

    let's just
    call them
    monsters. . .


    too many times
    i've picked myself
    up without ever
    falling just to be
    setup for the rise
    again; it just seems
    a bit too non-cliche
    to be true.

    maybe i'll one day
    fall into normality
    with the rest of
    this jungle; but for
    now i'll let the
    river run through
    me, not around me.

    i'll embrace it as
    if it was a stranger,
    and i'll be as
    apprehensive to it
    as if it was my
    lover. i'll seek
    the goodness in it
    like it was an
    enemy, and i'll
    aim to see the
    worst like it
    was my mother.

    just revert back
    to the stage
    or normality, and
    be not afraid, but
    go by yourself; i'd
    rather not acknowledge
    its presence.

    trust me, now . . .

    i'd never lie to
    myself.
    glycerine.

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    Re: IE: River Runs Through Me

    This poem was great!

    I loved every word & how you finished it. I read your battle with Bell & was like ehh.. But after reading this your other poem just seemed rushed. The way that you talking to the reader just makes this a very touching & emotional poem to read. I loved every word!

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    Re: IE: River Runs Through Me

    the battle with bell was just something i wrote real quick and shit. . .

    butr appreciate the feed, get at me with a link when you need some feed
    glycerine.

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    Re: IE: River Runs Through Me

    I could tell stay up though your a very good writer when you dont rush so stay up

    http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=324737

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    i'll get at that link before long.
    glycerine.

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    up.
    glycerine.

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    yeah
    glycerine.

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    yea mang
    glycerine.

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