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    Stuck!

    More pills! Make me immortal
    Reality hasn't reached the door, still
    Walk through the portal, with portions
    Of distorted morphine paints a portrait
    of morbid corpses decaying in orbit.
    I stray, I'm an orphan. Enslaved without purpose
    Searching for my place in the storage
    Erasing my mordem
    when I'm in the grave lets see em try to extort me!
    Bigwigs chortling, im the victim
    Hear em say "We tricked him"
    gave him visions, eyeballs livid
    I recall I'm living broken
    Tripped out and lonesome
    But I can't switch my focus
    To different notions
    And kill this lonesome shadow that follows me
    As I persist this motion
    A sad moan tears down my anatomy
    But who's aware the sound shattered me
    To the system I'm a frowning masterpiece
    These puppeteers stay shouting blasphemy
    The sound is saddening. Madness, this package chases after me
    This isn't just a ghastly dream. I've met with reality
    And I'm not pleased to meet it
    Fading out of my dream sequence
    These mean demons that surrounded me since
    My teen weekends, where the harsh beatings occured
    When I was a bird
    By these chains only freaks see!
    No meetings, no clinic no way I can win it
    I'll just bleed till I'm missing
    Feebly kissing
    The ground level goodbye
    I'm stuck in the sky
    Troubled mind
    I am high
    Much too high





    now that ive returned, im trynna shake of the bit of rust, throwing around schemes, strings, rhymes and topics.. u know

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    I love you soul

    .. good to have another abst counter part back. grab some links for me though.. I'll give you until tomarrow or some shit. go to the collective's thread aswell, collab ideas floating around.
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    I really couldn't follow what you were talking about but its sounds nice and thats all that really counts right? But anyway i can't really find a topic here at all. Like at first i though you were trapped in space and then you went to completely another place and came back again...idk...good use of vocabulary though, you sound a little wimsical with your rhyme scheme, idk but good job anyway

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    the piece was great man. it kind of juggled simplisity and complicated poetic aspects, but overall it was this mass of pure creativity. I loved the sense of dissorganization. it almost mimmicked the content. the lack of structurdized rhyme scheme is something a lot of people fuck up, but with you, it was handled like a true abst.co pro. the reader only has to read on, and everything will roll off the tongue without a single flaw or break. the content was cool as well. it kind of drifted between realms of real and surreal in the styles of the descriptions and imagery. overall, I enjoyed it a lot. hyped to have you back man.

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