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    The Dark Continent,

    Born 1813 Blantyre near Glasgow, Bonny Scotland
    Dr David Livingstone’s studies/ reports were sent to the Royal Geographical Society in London
    He always brought with him a Bible, a magic lantern, compass, and sextant: two small mirrors and a telescope used for surveying navigation measuring the altitudes of celestial bodies and their angular distances.





    The Dark Continent,

    1840

    Many people saw Africa as a land of impenetrable jungle of ferocious animals, bloodthirsty black savages, and disease.

    The Great White Hope




    Never walking alone, since he was aided by exceptional others
    For he saw the local witchdoctors as his professional brothers
    By boat, by ox, by foot he travelled over a colossal distance
    To establish Christian missions and provide medical assistance
    As much as a man of god, he was also a man of science
    Spreading the gospel, studying Geographic environments
    Mauled by myriads of mosquitoes, baffled with malaria campaigning
    Still he established churches and schools, helped hygiene and sanitation
    He fought disease then wrote decrees, and carried a magic lantern
    Married the daughter of a fellow missionary, they had six children.
    When this missionary saw the atrocity, an Arab slave trade could give
    He felt pissed, and resolved to fight slavery as long as he should live
    Dude didn’t do it for money, that’s just what Mr Livingstone did
    He’d take the rain with the sunny, and made this place as his home is

    When his baby daughter died while travelling, David sent his family to Britain
    But he stayed in Africa upon mission at hand… so farewell he wished them

    Gripped by Wanderlust

    Left Upon a quest to track down the source of the River Nile
    Things went wrong, his bearers fell ill, oxen withered and died,
    Many servants ran away, rather than face warlike tribes over yonder…
    The places now known as Tanzania, Burundi, and Rwanda
    Scared of what was ahead, some started blinding and F’in, and left
    Two more servants ran off, taking his quinine and medicine chest
    Now supplies exhausted with almost all hope diminished
    His small party crept to where they lay up in the Ujiji village

    Meanwhile the so-called civilised world wondered, people shed tears
    To children and mother dad had apparently disappeared for five years
    The Herald sent top reporter Henry Stanley to find the white Doctor
    The head of an expenditure of 192 men, he set of from Zanzibar
    Their search lasted eight months, untill Stanley saw an emaciated figure
    Stanley: “I thank God Doctor that I have been permitted to see you”
    Dr Livingstone: “I feel most thankful that I am here to welcome you”

    The rescue was none too soon… for after two years minus medicine
    Doc was ill; he still refused a return to London to dine on fine venison
    Back home now known, national hero, his name widely mentioned
    Africa salutes the same; yet he disused fame and holds Holy intentions
    In this jungle far over the sea, “I still have much work to do” said he
    So, provided with all sorts of provisions needed - supplied by Stanley
    David pressed ahead on his mission, seeking the source of the Nile
    But got somewhat lost in miles of Congo, now in remorse not a smile…

    At Chitambo village, clear morning May 1st 1873, the final day and year
    His bearers found him kneeling by his bedside in an attitude of prayer
    His head rested in his hands, and alas, not a soul can rouse this man
    Such artisan, this artists plan now paints an ending doused with sand

    Word spread, as converts came by the thousands to pay final respects
    And, his body would be sent back to Britain, with less one vital aspect
    As the Doctors heart was removed… and buried in the soil of Africa
    Then began a funeral parade that took nine months to reach Zanzibar
    His heart borne across the wild land - by hordes of Africans chanting
    Singing hymns - he had taught them, they merged drums and dancing
    His Soul rests where it belongs, since this is where he was ever happy
    Plus, his physical body was buried in London - at Westminster Abbey

    Good people are Sooooooooooooooo Hard to find nowadays…
    So come now let US remember… the Bones of the Brave
    David the Doctor forever remains a Living Cornerstone of faith




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    Re: The Dark Continent,

    uppances
    uppances

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    Re: The Dark Continent,

    you're short a link man.. I'll give you until the end of the day.
    po'ethics /
    abstanticollective.

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    Re: The Dark Continent,

    Quote Originally Posted by dov
    you're short a link man.. I'll give you until the end of the day.


    http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=321729


    ^stick that in your fucking pipe and smoke it

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    Re: The Dark Continent,

    I was kind of fenced on this piece. I re-read through quite a few parts, and it seemed like the more times I skimmed through, I would find more and more errors:

    Mauled by myriads of mosquitoes, baffled with malaria campaigning
    Still he established churches and schools, helped hygiene and sanitation
    He fought disease then wrote decrees, and carried a magic lantern
    Married the daughter of a fellow missionary, they had six children.


    just the first of quite a few example of very awkward word placement and rhyming. also, in the first verse especially, the consistency of your language wavered a bit. for the better half you spoke very intellectually, and scholarly, which worked because it seemed to fit your character persona.. but then you went into describing him as 'dude' and saying he was 'pissed' and to me that kind of destroyed the vibe of higher thinking. aside from those things, I did thoroughly enjoy the story itself; read almost like a short story. the overall message was cool aswell and I felt like the closer was great. very strong way to end the piece, and that was just perfect.
    po'ethics /
    abstanticollective.

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    Re: The Dark Continent,

    yeah thanks for having a look atti, i mean dov, . yeah my whole internal flow was off on this because. i was trying to turn an interesting piece i read into an art-form off-sorts. it was just a short essay i read and i wanted to add my own language to it while keeping most of the books tone , hence the pissed and dude talk...


    amazing facts and stories book i read and wanted to try a prose approach which i havent for a while , so yeah it is most open to errors albeit


    pz

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    Re: The Dark Continent,

    are good people hard to find!!

    hang around the light!!
    Mak'in History!!

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    Re: The Dark Continent,

    yeah



    are we all closed on this one then


    damn might as well delete all my om's from this site i reckon


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