Sins of Regret

[P. Mortuus]

Repented Sins of Regret

I repent the regretful sins of past times
Written accounts in blood carelessly
Detail in every one of them last lines
Granules of closed dunes fell sparingly

Tick, Tock, Tick, Tock

Give me papyrus to placate my mind with
Give me a pen to list my crimes with
Give me time to concoct false details
Give me mine to shield from what entails

Tick, Tock, Tick, Tock

She waltzed onto the couch, laughing the night away
She halted & crouched, an invitation she lightly swayed
Then turned away obliging me to come hither…close
Sliding clothes induce ripples of sweat, nervously pose
A prostitute performing to amass adolescent adorations
Cultivated teenage sex lives, my girlfriend the prostitute
Placations from her false mouth only drove me to despair
Verbose clients created camera captures to sit & stare

Tick, Tock, Tick, Tock

Dinners fully arranged with drowsing pills spilled into her wine flute
Drinking chute laced with powdered crystals, deviously arranged
She smiles, she drinks…then she stumbles and begins to fall
I catch her…with iron nails…under the carpet covered and all
“AGGHHHHH!” she screams with pleasure, my darling crying
Times flying hearing those loud orgasms as I tip molten wax
All over her body, first her head then her back, she’s laying
Mozart playing in the background, as I ground the blunt axe
Onto her knee, too dull to cut so I colour her purple and blue
Then a red spurt of vividness sprays into my dilated pupils
I tear away the rags covering the body she so often abused
Used the oozed blood with blades a smoothie made of pooled ills

…She choked on the drink

I made sure she was alive, semi conscious yet aware of the scene
She screamed when she looked at where her little finger had been
She liked men fingering, so I picked her finger and fingered her out
After her every shout, she blacked out then I arranged her lips to pout
Scissors sharpened I kissed those lips, then cut, snip, cut, they’re sliced
Diced them with her iced tongue, taste better with Bacardi on the side
Miming me obscenities, she needs to lose weight so I carve off excess
Flesh; her toned torso now tattooed with a meshed net time for the rest
To follow suit, she’s opens her legs in anticipation for more action
I tease her by inserting a fraction; then complete a full chainsaw insertion
Pull the trigger, pull the trigger….I pull it, she screams in agony & writhes
In pain, I ride with joy & her body goes lame, slowly the chainsaw glides
Back out, I sit back and admire the abstract art I created, an upstart
To her, so I now leave her with frosted seamen from our neighbour Doug Bart

I regret what I did…I really do

Steve Martin Matthews you are accused for 13 counts of murder
Furthermore, you also tried to blame an innocent man
You are an extreme case of necrophilia but shall not be given
Any psychological counselling instead left to die & repent
For the sins you committed murdering those 13 prostitutes.

[P. Mortuus]

http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=312621
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=312505

[Nique.]

niiice piece. kind of sick, but it was really good. great content. i'm also really feeling the flow and the emotional content. i liked the creativeness you brought to the piece also. the colors didn't really do much for me, but overall this was a great piece. might even nominate it. pz.

[P. Mortuus]

well thanks...i tried something different and it's good that it's well recieved.

[Angel of Dopenes]

damn. that shit was deep. scared the HELL outta me though, but i liked it. the multies was nice. feels like you put alot of emotion into this one. straight from the heart. a well done peice(still kinda creepy)

[P. Mortuus]

Yup i went back to the fucked up ish with this.

[Ascend]

Was a little o_O' Wtf-like.

Aside from that, it was a masterful piece. Imagery was excellent as was the story.

[P. Mortuus]

Yup thanks for the comments.

[Bilayer]

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http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=312641

this piece was well put together mann i liked how pak showed his mean side in this battle its like the devil came inyou and work some sicking shit but it work well the vocab was on point and you had some really nice imagery mann like how you describe alot wit double adjectives the tick tock and the other sub titles in this piece really sparked this piece up alot this was definetly a nice piece pakaveli one of you most intresting

Hit the link

[P. Mortuus]

Yup thanks...will hit the link as soon as possible..prolly today or tommorwo no doubt.

[P. Mortuus]

Yup all linkages checked.

[mc pyro.]

wow really creative peice i loved the topic on this even though it was disturbing it was very interesting and i liked how you ended it with the little non rhyming epilouge that was cool also the imagery in this was great almost eye popping which added theme to the topic you went into such detail with your work it seemed i was watching this like in a movie or something the wordplay was great and i thought you used all the right words in the right places maybe a little more vocab but other then that great job leave feed on the om in my sig

[P. Mortuus]

Thanks, Links checked.

[NiNjah Red]

yeah i swear 1 quick glimpse tells me this shit is gonna be warped..

the concept goes strange as fuck and trippy.whhich is most interesting...since a most poetic approach you bringeth forth still with quiete an aggressive undertone in the flow and movement i woud say in my own mind.......



Then turned away obliging me to come hither…close
Sliding clothes induce ripples of sweat, nervously pose

yup. imagery is like that shit when you bring peoples eyes into the room of imagination and w/e. so shit is str8 graphic........ flow just developes dopely f'sho and keeps the read or listen if possible on point..........



imagery was tops in many parts--

Dinners fully arranged with drowsing pills spilled into her wine flute
Drinking chute laced with powdered crystals, deviously arranged
.strange rhymes arrangement as well cuz.lol.........



nthe end few lines of the last verse in Black seemed to lose the flow with those longer lines for some reason. like i guess it was a winding down moment. that could perhaps bee sharpened if you should decide to record this on point joint
mad rhymes.sic coneptuls and language displayed on fire f'sho





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[P. Mortuus]

Yeah thanks..i did tone down a ll with the flow at the end so i could close it lol..but yeah thanks for the comments.