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    Poetry is named after. . .

    Poetry is named after. . .

    Poe- the master of delirious conspiracy,
    Serious to the regency of mysterious agency,
    Plagiarize envy against popular tell tales of the guy,
    Who’d die for words he wrote down on paper and I’d
    die to read them, to feed them into cerebellums of the century,
    Without proper props they’d forget to mention me, school code
    of conduct would detention me for open minded admission see –
    I’ve let in a world of trouble, world of hate doubled, world of
    art speech bubbled without hurting any two that are coupled,
    Gin and rye, whisky high five with my buddy drinking on a high rise,
    Open mind, tan our eyes until we’re blind. I feel just fine,
    Sign my name to a royalty contracted that I didn’t even know was mine.
    He did it too, so I guess we’re in this together, two weeks later get
    a letter saying that the mortgage doubled over for the better but as
    long as I have my writing I’m still a trendsetter.

    Poetry is named after. . .

    The future of the revolution, the future verbal Constitution,
    and the further upholding of peace and the dilution,
    Integration with the world is just called cold fusion,
    Who am I losin’? The world? We’re in last because
    we’re choosin’. Two shots up, sober down to the ground,
    Poe and I call it boozin’. I rip his first manuscript apart and
    he’s fumin’!
    Hit the sides,a nd make the abroad study wide. We are the
    new generation and we're here to fight.

    I still love you man!

    Poetry is named after. . .

    Notorious crimes, forensic mimes, in these
    foren-sick times, with my own two eyes I spy.
    Poe with me and he’s got my back, got the slack,
    can’t hear his voice, but he’s auto orally on this track.


    Poe is Poetry.
    Poetry is the future.
    Suture the wound of Poetry.
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    holy fuckin Christ.....it's long...I'll make sure to edit this post with feed in like an hour
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    Quote Originally Posted by Da Professor
    holy fuckin Christ.....it's long...I'll make sure to edit this post with feed in like an hour
    Don`t bother posting then. I`d rather have no feed from a person that is lazy enough to worry about length.

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    WEll ...hmmm...i have to say i never knew about the poet named poe though he is meant to be one of AMericas most gifted poets...anyway...this was good i liked it as it was written in 1st person perspective and the reader can take it as if the witer is inspired and talking about poe or if the writer is playing poe in the piece. Many things you said are the causes of writing for me such as the world and it's hypocricy and the society na mean. The language of this was ver good though the visual structure was so so however, the flow and transitions were smooth and allowed an easy read...and i don't know why the other guy found it so long as when you start reading it finishes in a couple of minutes due to the ease with which it's read. I liked the word suture being put in as well...though suture is what is used to close up a wound...but yeah, overall this was a complex rhymescheme that was written to read with ease...Good job.

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    Edgar Allen Poe?

    I'll leave feed later, I was just wondering.

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    Shmup. :/ \:

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    god damn homie... thaz some deep shit right there... flow wuz dead on point in this. actually a piece with a deeper meaning (something rare nowadays). Excellent use of vocabulary... nice drop homie, keep up tha good work.

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    good piece. i nominated this for omgof, becaoz you had a sick flow, but great metaphors, and kept the vocabulary under control as well.. the topic, semi-original, it has been done for, but you did this piece very well, and i likd the way it was almost like a self-prop verse... because it had all the elements of one of those.. the rhyme scheme and all.. you had a poetic structure as well. that doesnt take away from the piece, but visual flow is for noobanators, us kool cats can read an actual flow ;p... good piece


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    Wow.. soulstice and pak, congradulations for being the only 2 in this thread (excluding exact) that aren't lazy idiots... anyways... good work indeed man the whole concept was original, i havent seen ne1 do a piece on Poe yet, so it was fresh for the most part... im not gonna harp on structure, yes your's "looked" ugly but the appearance of the piece isnt very important to me, its the content... the flow was, for the most part, perfect, only a few miniscule fall offs... umm the internals and the rhyming was all good, i liked the switch up in schemes very frequently, it really kept me reading.. the whole idea of the last 3 lines there was outstanding, the whole, "Poetry is the future" yet referring to Poe, who was a huge part of poetry's past and history.. all in all this was a very outstanding piece, although the lack of abstract and metaphorical speech made this one of my least faveroites from you personally, it still was very well put together...

    good work my friend and if u have a minute check out my new OM in my sig titled Satan's So Seductive Ft. Pakaveli.. it's my first bit of writing in about a month in a half, but it's still not bad... well done and goodbye.
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