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    Obviously Knot

    Without reason I return letters
    to sender entitled RE: Son.
    Cursing innovation... that
    hostile, bastard child of tradition
    who wields words as weapons,
    welding cold steel to paper as
    fingers nervously turn the pages;
    eyes find each line like a trigger.

    If prepositions could pistol whip
    to hold the students attention
    instead of elitists debating over
    the thought of a thesaurus
    as being something prehistoric,
    then we'd have hands, not heads
    filled with erasable lead and
    the butt of a gun will be nothing
    more then a subject predicate.

    *Editors note: The printing press is dead.
    We've burned all the better quotes.

    I hoped when the ink dried we'd
    have died to this way of thinking,
    but my stomachs in 'nots' criticizing
    blind usage of such intricate plots.
    Gut wrenched that you monkeys
    are using pens and pads to bang
    hungrily on pots and pans ever since
    readers digest got an appetite!

    You've tied you're own noose
    but doubtfully hung upside down.
    Now drown in loose leaves or
    breath a sigh into blank sheets
    as a subtle sign of relief for
    feet buried silently in the clouds.
    Before concrete thinking comes to
    cement heads to the ground.

    To be honest, you'll go unrecognized
    because journalists are more
    concerned with politics and society
    then the way a dead poet writes.

    Understand?
    (or should I impart my parts of speech;
    debrief literature, literally?)




    Hmm?... Obviously knot.
    We'll continue lynching ourselves to the top.
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    of everything existing.
    Po'ethics
    abstanticollective.

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    of everything existing.
    Po'ethics
    abstanticollective.

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    of everything existing.
    Po'ethics
    abstanticollective.

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    As always Mindless, your drop not only is full of abstract and creative
    comparisons and metaphors, but it is also a metaphor in itself...The
    rhyming in this was beautifully done, the internal slant rhymes added
    greatly to the read and the flow as I read it out loud...the message/story
    was fresh and original, especially with the way you approached it...
    always a pleasure to read your drops Mindless


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    Re: Obviously Knot

    very good i really felt this, yiour play on words is amazing, i have always enjoyed your work, it almostr seemd as if there was a multi faceted meaning to this piece if so i really felt alot of it either way. the imagry was ok,
    its a shame ghow restricted somone can feel, metaphors are exc. you are known for them, but is is a shame the way society is, expecialy the mass media and how politics are inveloped into the overthrow of the gov by misconstrueing, lieing and adding false accusasations based on here say to exite ratings.....
    if you write for your self or a loved one, you can never be wrong!!!!
    ""If you write for yourself or a loved one, you can never be wrong!!!!""
    -The world makes me cold,the marines make me thoughtless-the difference between you and me is, thats just it...

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    Re: Obviously Knot

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