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    second thoughts on life

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    i need to take second thoughts on life because, the first ones were incinerated
    in a relationship that was degenerated, livin in denial believing it isnt faded
    it wasnt the girl i cared for though, it was the son i brought into the world
    probably the only thing left to keep me goin, stripped as the events unfurled
    but i wasnt about to go out like that, this young fellow shares my last name
    somthin that bitch'll never have, doesnt matter now, her ass was past date
    damn she was due for the new for old replacement, and i was glad be rid of it
    caught the bitch tryna run with my son uh uh.... i wasnt havin a bit of it
    back ya shit up before i smack a bitch up, there's one item that wont be leavin
    how she stood with a puzzled look on her face, 'surely you dont need reason!
    you wanna boycot this like treason, go on go, but your not takin my child
    he stay's right here with me you can visit, come back when im not so riled'
    then i might take second thoughts on life, and save your ass from devastation
    but right now fuckin with me could be, the worst thing you were ever faced with

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