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    Question Slowly

    I look up, as a tear rolls slowly down my cheek
    I think about the better days, and I wonder if I'll ever feel that way again
    You look at me, with those eyes I know so well
    Always serious yet loving, so deep and insightful, as though you're always in control
    but not today, not now
    Now you look so scared, like for once you dont have the answer
    I gaze at you, looking into those brown eyes that I fell in love with
    Hoping that you would still love me and understand
    How you could've said those things, I sit and wonder for a moment, if this is all a dream
    If I can wake up in the morning and have you there and I'll be relieved
    You're looking at me with such a confusion, a confusion I have never seen before
    You slowly pull me towards you and wipe the tears from my face
    As you whisper that you're leaving and disappear without a trace
    Hated By Many Confronted By None

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    aint rhyme as much.. but poems dont gotta rhyme.. creative.. seems like sometyhing was on ur mind when u wrote this.. stay up

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    This piece was below average you had no structure,rhyme scheme was horrible vocabulary wasnt that great no multiples it was very basic there was no imagery and i dont feel like you stayed on topic and you didnt execute your point across because you got lost along the way

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