Friends

[Trema]

Valuable i keep, but closer to my heart i teach them
-but backstabbers are born every second, its hard to see them
friends are suppost to be down in the hardest of times
-from being on bail, to getting chased by enemies with them nines
my mind is soley focused on writing music and making money
-lady sniper was down, i remember the times she was so funny
but the jokes turnt into smoke,ma gurlfrend switched to dope
-how could i cope, everything on top of that,plus ma heart broke
starting eating artichokes,thinking of the true meaning of this friendship
-the ones who stuck by me, were the one's who didn't flip
i aint got much of them,ma heart beats 110beats per minute
-eyes keep flickering every time, i write a rhyme and its finished
anybody says they neva been scared of the streets, is a fake
-durs a second in yo life, when your the piece of cake
ready to be eaten, destin to be beaten-
its your choice wether u survive or drop
-real friends will shed blood, wetha dey know they will die or not
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I know its a lil short and shit, but just expressing the way i feel.

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[FATAL CONCEPT]

this piece was ok, your flow was ight but it fell off at times, the message was there most of the time and when it was it was easily relatable to the reader. the style was good, it was easy to follow. You show try and work more on staying on topic cuz it fell off a little in the middle but overall this was a very decent drop.

keep droppin, keep elevatin

[Prodi*j]

this was a nice piece, it was quite easy to follow , rhyming was good and the flow was aiight , like the other dude said at times you did fall off topic lines were stretched in some parts but it was ok , vocab was alright and i enjoyed it....but seriously it was an ok drop just keep at it.