straight skillz ft/ lyric one night extravaganza

[*LYRIQ*]

straight skillz
Look I only got one night, one opportunity, and one chance
It’s the first and last time together, I gotta fulfil this romance
Just listen there no one is in sight, it feels like a dream
She’s beautiful; her hair is glistened by a lonely light beam
I want to make a move, but don’t know if she would approve
I kiss her cheek, it’s like a chess game and now it’s her move
Since we will never meet again we will both lose, god damn
Im holding her hand, her skin resembles the softness of a lamb
She kisses me; I feel like im on top of the world, she says I am
As I hold her in the night, the stars are as bright as her smile
She’s dressed to kill, oh so sexy, im so in love with her style
The night grows old; I can’t help but feel that it is complete
She wants to go to my place, so we drive away on the wet street
Laying on my bed I stare into her eyes and it makes me realise
That I never want to leave you, and I aint telling you no lies
Although this is a one night thing, you fill the whole in my heart
Today we met, tomorrow we leave, and it’s tearing me apart
11:30, we only have a half hour left together, I touch her thigh
Soon she will be my past, under the covers of my bed we lie
As she leaves me house and my life forever, I begin to cry

Lyric
one night to share and you choose to be wit this girl
i cant help but to feel you the nigga i been lookin for in the whole world
but after tonight baby we go our seperate ways
so here we lay together gettin lost in a sex daze
this is more then a physical connection past the brains perception
this night was meant to be and in my heart aint no room for redemption
this sexual tension is gettin the best of me damn
got ya up on my thigh you got me ready to bust man
you got the girl op-an and im lovin what ya sho-an
i want you to keep go-in baby like theres no tomorrow
when this night is ova our hearts both gon be lost in such sorrow
your love i borrowed and how can i repay such affection
look at my reflection and the opposite of me is you in a dream location
your what my hearts been missin
your mind got my body trippin
put you all in me now i got ya body slippin
rippin my insides but yet so gentle in every touch
i clutch ya back you bite my neck and i let out a moan like damn we doin to much
so sorry we cant be but this night was well worth the splurge
one day we'll meet again baby you mark my words

[Blanco.]

Links

http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=293265
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=293189

[*LYRIQ*]

my bad for not puttin that

[detremental.]

Straight Skillz- Your verse was iight man. You flowed well. Your structure was there, and you had iight imagery as well. You hade good vocab and the only thing I would tell you to work on is your complexity. Just make the story a little deeper.

Lady_Lyric- The biggest thing you need to work on in your verse is flow and multi's. Your flow wasn't too good and you were missing muti's. Your vocab was there as well as your structure. You need to have more complexity also. Just take your story to a deeper level.

keep writing to both.

[*LYRIQ*]

Good Lookin

[Blanco.]

thanks for feed and uppin

[Smokey.]

LIKES FLOW FROM BTH PRETTY GOOD FOR UR FIRST OM WHYTE I SEE U TRYNA SWITCH UP UR SKILLZ BUT NAH COULD AUSED SOME BETTER WORDPLAY BUT OVERALL I LIKED IT AND WHYTE U DOPNESS LOL

[*LYRIQ*]

good lookin

[Blanco.]

Thanks Smokey

[Blanco.]

Upping for more feed.

[Blanco.]

Uppp

[mc pyro.]

skillz: that verse was ill yo nice rhymin and multis really showed some good shit wit that in there it flowed really nicely and the vocab was good also for the sturcture the whole thing was great so was the imagery

lyric: same thing to you that i said to skillz just work on ya multis a lil but u also had some real good vocab in there so it was cool nice peice keep spittin
leave feed on my om in ma sig

[noncentz]

SKILL you are far from garabage you have the gift but you need to polish it the simplicity of this didnt feed the hunger your imagdry led to.

Lyric-not an amateur but you delivered this in amatuer standing i see alot of talent and potential this was not a strong intro but not weak just there and i can see from your work you have much more to offer work on doing just that give them your heart and they will return with love.

[Blanco.]

upp

[Blanco.]

Upp