Ski

[Boris Funk]

its all about less being more, suggestive applause
...cashing-in on societies collective divorce
the future exists as thoughts in the sky
praise to the high... just another slave to the lie
pursuaded to try-im hoping for instictive denial
but leaving with a vision and a twist in my smile
and the ghost can haunt your mind if you know-him
the river is flowing, im tryna age my skin without growing
poisonous poem... life runs at multiple speeds
evolves in a week, written for chicka with a mole on her cheek
freak! Distortion with a flavour of craving
a session of saving, eyeing up a trip to Beijing
almost amazing. No divider- act calm, pass the lighter,
if the police are in mirror, hide the weed and the grinder!


i replyed to loads, dont be gay.

[DrunknMonkey]

This piece was a good read......Multi's were on point..Imagery was slacking ...Vocab was cool .... overalll I'd say that this was short and sweet .... My favorite lines were the last two 4 real......dat's real shit..

[Boris Funk]

mm...

my fav is

the ghost can haunt your mind if you know-him
the river is flowing, im tryna age my skin without growing

i think... you know when you type sumthing, and read it back like... wow...

[Boris Funk]

and still put dope ahead of hope because the high it creates! lol

[LedgenZ]

you might be the most interesting and original writer on the site...or maybe just the most random. your verses are always unique and otherwise refreshing. you have a witty way of expressing yourself without ever really overstating your perspective <~~don't know, don't ask, anyways this piece was fun, flowed great, and came off in a pretty smart manner, it was kind of weird too...but i think that what make your pieces hallmarks.

check it:

the future exists as thoughts in the sky
praise to the high... just another slave to the lie
pursuaded to try-im hoping for instictive denial
but leaving with a vision and a twist in my smile
and the ghost can haunt your mind if you know-him
the river is flowing, im tryna age my skin without growing

^those were your best lines. the first four rhymed perfectly and the wording was excellent. as for the last two...whoa...what can i say? crazy fuckin wordplay.

check ya pm's man

peace

[LyricallyInclined]

the peice was a okay read, not the best and not the worst, it had a good theme going, and the vocab was pretty good, i didnt see much of a rhyming scheem going on though, you should try to rhyme a little more, if you dont feel the need to rhyme then try posting it in poetic scriptures, over all it was a okay read

[LamaGod]

damn this was tight

wording was pretty much perfect, flow was nice and well.. you just basically showed you had skills with this. short and sweet and definently worth the read. its different than what Im used to reading and it had alot of clever lines. well.. not alot since there wasnt alot of lines LOL.. but you know.. this shit was nice dude.

"its all about less being more, suggestive applause
...cashing-in on societies collective divorce
the future exists as thoughts in the sky
praise to the high... just another slave to the lie"

^nice

[chitown_mex11]

it was str8 but not great, the flow was good but i just didnt like the topic but the vocab was ok but overall it was good