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Thread: The Old Days

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    The Old Days

    In The Old Days we were like slaves digging our own graves
    Dealing cocaine, Working for other people while getting no pays
    No Way, i was going to live like this until the day i see darkness
    The way they treated us were horrific and made me heartless
    I Couldn't bear this, but if i spoke up they would kill me instantly
    I wish I never was alive! I wish i could go back seriously to infinitiy
    Because this shit is too bad, so worse, everyday i always get heart
    Working shirtless, whipping me and yelling at me, grabbing me to start
    Grasping me, laughing at me, staring at me, not caring about anything
    Basically nothing really, thinking of toruring people is fucking silly.....
    Praying every step of the of the way, no way i'd ever see the day
    Always worked at dark, kept my indentity on the low and had to creep
    Every night i'd get 1 hour of sleep, due to the fact i spent most of it on streets
    I begged to get let free on my knee, but they waved me away quickly
    They never listened to me, I couldn't live like this so i had to end life
    While on the streets i spotted a speeding car and jumped in front of it
    They hit me and i felt the pain rush through me, Then blood started to drip

    An ambulance rushed to the sight and in blood was names written
    The names of the people behind the whole torture plan..
    By the time they got their i was already past away and was happy

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    R.I.P

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    uppin^

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    This piece is a good take on the old days in relivence to now and then....Ya imagery was cool....vocab could've been better.....though the piece flowed well....you were lacking in the multi department though you had a few......But overall this was a good drop...the emotion you could feel....and the way you worded it kept the reader interested throughtout....Good Shit ......Keep It Up.....

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