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    America Explained!!

    What Is America??
    A Mixture A Poutporui
    Man Made Of Slaves And Trade
    Who'd Rather Behave Than Be Engraved
    Yet We Are Not Alone
    Other Are Thrown Far From Home
    Confined Yet Condoned
    That Their Culture's Gone
    And Not Known To Youth
    The Thruth Does Hurt
    Here
    Where Ya Worse Comes First
    And
    Ya Birth Comes Last
    We Are The Past
    And Yet An Un Seen Dream
    Of One "King" Doing Impossible Things
    Not To Be Mean But It Seems
    That Most Citizen's Are Lost With No Means
    And Only Contributing
    And Whose To Says This Is The Right Thing
    A Currupt Government BASED ON ONE MAN With A Plan
    To Destroy Another Man's Land
    Who All The Time Had THE Dirt On The Other Side Of His Hand !!
    I Guess That's What You Could Call
    American!!!!!!!!



    LOOKIN 4 A COLLAB 4 A EXTENDED VERSION !!!! IF YOU WANT IN JUST P.M.
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    this wasn't the best....but I have to say that it was actually very funny in places,you had dope concepts and the short lines helped this peice flow better,you need to up your vocab a bit in this peice but I still enjoyed reading this and I think that youhave a lot of talent and I look forward to seeing more drops from you....nice peice still some elevation needed imo but you did well here...peace

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    Uppin 4 feed would be appreciated.........

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    ayo

    it was iight like 6/10 pretty good
    short lines made it flow witch made me read it I cant read an OM piece with-out flow.... yea... its hard to tell whare it rymes unless you read it aloud witch i did the second time.. i was feelin tha short lines but fo futer refrence i would'nt do that in a battle lol
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    I don't do that shit in battles....

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    Quote Originally Posted by Maaco
    ayo

    it was iight like 6/10 pretty good
    short lines made it flow witch made me read it I cant read an OM piece with-out flow.... yea... its hard to tell whare it rymes unless you read it aloud witch i did the second time.. i was feelin tha short lines but fo futer refrence i would'nt do that in a battle lol
    I don't do short lines in a battle my structure is tottaly different......

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    Ye i thought soo lol that would be kinda whack.....but tha piece is nice....
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    thank's ......Feed ....Appreciated

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    yo thats good work kid. im glad you in my crew now. you had a nice flow on this one but you need to work on your structure. try to make it even as possible. i like the topic and i liked your vocabulary too. if this was your first then you did really good. keep it up. ~1~

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    Good Look Kid I'm lookin to Elevate while Repping 4 the Crew so that's why I need tht sig a.s.a.p.......A nd that was my first post so I just played with the structure a lil bit to get a feel for my nest one....The short line thing was basically for the readers purpose...(better understanding)...!

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    ayo drunkenmonkey we should colabb some time.....lol......fo real
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    Quote Originally Posted by Maaco
    ayo drunkenmonkey we should colabb some time.....lol......fo real
    Get at me with a topic we can do something now (as in a Few Days) i.e. different time zones.....I'm MidWest(CHICAGO)...Make the topic Interesting and Differnet...so that I could come up with some diffenent views and aspect's ......Take some time and think of the Topic .....I've Never did a collab before so I'd want it to be D.O.P.E....

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    im try'n to get into D.O.P.E lol iight i'll send you a topic soon as i get one...
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    upping !!!!!!!!!

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