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Thread: Last Days

  1. May 11th, 2006, 07:49 PM #1
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    Last Days

    Chi Streets Grief
    Tears In My Mother Eyes
    Her Son's Steady Rolling Leafs
    Chief Weed From Iraq
    Drugs Support Terrorist Stop That
    What About Racisim To Blacks
    Convit's No Job 3 Kids To Support
    Life's A Bitch Beehind Solitary Rooms Bricks
    Probation And Shit
    Even Worse Does Freedom Exist
    Lift Spirit Fro Earth
    Cause Only He Knows Truth To This
    Not Told By Government
    War On Tv Shows
    And Ratings Loving It
    Get To See Em Kill Or Own People Evil
    The Devil's Hands Caress The Earths Catherdrial's
    Transparent Our Own Parents Steal From Children
    That's How It Is Ghetto Living........
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  2. May 11th, 2006, 07:54 PM #2
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    LINK 1
    http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=289876
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    http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=291425

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  3. May 11th, 2006, 07:54 PM #3
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    Pretty nice piece here, what I like is the message most, it could use a bit of work but i can see your heading in a good direction...Overall if you go back an rewrite this this will be a piece with a good message...Keep at it...

    If you get a chance hit me back on my piece...thanks peace...
    http://rapbattles.com/forum/showthre...03#post4441003

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  4. May 12th, 2006, 10:19 AM #4
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    uppin 4 feed back on this piece don't sleep...It's short and sweet..

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  5. May 12th, 2006, 10:22 AM #5
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    this was?!.....ok
    this was an ok piece!.
    nice politcal/marijuana/emotional drop!. nice uh...approach to the topic and shit.
    vocab was lacking. multies was lacking creativity was lacking. diversity was lacking but nice though it flowed real well!.

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  6. May 12th, 2006, 10:30 AM #6
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    Good look kid .... I really didn't do to mush work on this piece it was more so a keystyle piece....but it's aiight not my best...
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  7. May 12th, 2006, 10:36 AM #7
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    ^^
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    well just leave feed on mine now homes!.
    thanks!
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  8. May 14th, 2006, 09:23 PM #8
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    let's get some feed on this short piece.....
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  9. May 14th, 2006, 09:52 PM #9
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    I think this piece is in the vien of Common work such as content and flow wise which definitely isn't a bad thing. Overall I think it could been a bit longer, which would have helped develope your ideas a bit more. Overall its a good start just would like to see more full fludged ideas ina longer piece, otherwise great start and looking forward to one of your written and not keystyles.

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    http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=292214
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  10. May 14th, 2006, 09:54 PM #10
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    i liked this..nice rhymes....topic was interesting..flowed well..
    imagery was descent.and this peice was pretty short but..
    still pretty good..overall this was a nice peice....
    keep at it..you got potential..
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  11. May 14th, 2006, 10:13 PM #11
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    Good looking on the feed appre.....d

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  12. May 17th, 2006, 10:18 AM #12
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    this shit was short and to the point.....flowed well...imagery was there.....vocab was aiight....overall it was a good drop ..... keep at it man i see potential....
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