Death and Betrayal..... feat Pakaveli

[NiNjah Red]

1. NiNjah Red
2. Pakaveli




The fluids of toxic toads lace my arrows
shooting harshly, foe’s chased by sorrows
2 eyes’ gripped close as the music rolls
time to unfold the NiNjah mystic scrolls
Suppose I acted on every ferocious impulse…
…I’d probably of slew at-least 110 folks
2 kicks to the guts just for telling them jokes
Make mental notes… I’m provoked with ease
intent’s spoke clean & still I wrote this sleaze
Riding hot winds which carry me over destiny
siding not with this mockery of a monarchy
A subjective state… in this garden of hate
life’s earnings can turn into burdens & aches
The vessel of my soul seems a cauldron of waste
brainwaves polluted by the sermons of snakes
Foul nervous-tension is most certain to break…
bones of the betrayed as they turn in their graves


Backstabbed by enemies caused by felonies
Dramatic betonies, sinful causes of ebonies
I watch afar, yet the swatch of the nunchak bar
Seeps the blood of felonious stored in my car
Do not provoke the soul’s demons that’ll invoke
Vehemence that breeds bespoke bile as anti-dote
101 dead cadavers annihilated by mournful misery
Mystery of death environs the psyche so saddened
Yet yews of yachts row up the wilful that maddened
Astrologer I am, therefore the stars teach astronomy
Monotony of brethren ruins the economy of society
Clarity is a fantasy that runs the mind of many men
In the hollowed den lie the carcasses of the bloody ten
Your messenger maligns the monstrous monarchy
Yet the truth is told though the truth states such larky
A game of minds ensue and I will pass the verdict due
No clue the dew on the sky shows that death shall ensue

[NiNjah Red]

http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=291081
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=291356

[P. Mortuus]

This is the ish....nice work

[Soule]

Red: You had great flow and wordplay. But work on creativity and imaginary.

Pakavali: Nice wordplay. Wondrfull Flow and Imaginay. You to need to work on creativity.

In all the structre was meh but the peice was a 7-10.

Keep it up and work on thsoe weaknesses.

[Data-Ntry]

A this shit has HOT written all threw it.. The voab is crazy and not cha typical everyday use language...HAt's OFF to this piece... The Imagery is on point and both verse's flowed well throughout.. Pak ya opener was hot as fuck

"Backstabbed by enemies caused by felonies
Dramatic betonies, sinful causes of ebonies"

Both of the Drops was good man this was one of the best collabs I've read on this sight yet....KEEP UP THE GOOD WORK!!!!

________________________ELEVATION__________is the KEY !!!!!!
that's REAL TALK....Ya DIG

[P. Mortuus]

Ayo, preciate both the comments, thanks for taking out ya time to read it

[Soule]

lol go join Hidden talents look at the new roster.

[P. Mortuus]

lol go join Hidden talents look at the new roster.

I'll consider it, don't know about Ninjah though

[Evolve]

This was pretty decent. The dark evil theme has been done alot .. but it was still good. Ninjah had a really nice flow. Pac's was good too but seemed to try and force his volcab a little. All in all a decent read

[P. Mortuus]

preciate the comments

[Soule]

Well? Hidden talents.

[P. Mortuus]

Well? Hidden talents.

If a crew dies i'll be there.

[Soule]

lol. I2 never gonna die.
TNL never gonna die.

[~*~Dope-One~*~]

Yo That Shit Was Tight Because Yall Had Some Really Good Creativity and Th Vocbulary Was Good I Like And It Was A Whole Decent Verse(s) And Yall Did Really Well With Flow

[GrimmyReaps]

damn 2 of the dopest topical niggaz on the same track....this peice was outragous i liked that topic...death and betrayl some Julius ceaser shit....but both had good vocab wordplay and flow....but im use to topicals bein size 1 and centered....so the structure is ok....but its not how im use to it...yall had good lengthed lines not to long or to short...good peice...