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    MakeShyft - |The Marionette Device|

    The Marionette Device.


    5 out of 1000 people believe they have been "taken" by aliens.

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    I have a dream..

    People will call my name, people will love me
    No matter how ugly, rugged or lovely, some see
    Me as a dead vulture picked apart and trashed
    Some see me as a born leader, born in the ash
    Of burned tar, and fragmented bone, alone
    My future is engraved with stone, my home
    Is the only place, I will never bleed,
    I will choose the future, this is my DREAM.
    I work 9-5 minimal wage, I am a ghost
    But this job is nothing to me, nobody knows
    This is my zone, to become the gold
    That fools see easy, That fools see as their..
    OWN.

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    88% of the people who've been abducted are abducted more than once.

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    Tonight as I sleep, I will dream the real me
    Where the world exists along with real feelings
    And I can be followed, where people respect
    Me, the head of humanity.. the future ahead
    ..Of thee

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    92% of all "alien abductions" are at night and dusk.

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    Steadily, slowly, they pull me from my bed
    I can’t move my ears, my feet or my legs
    I can’t see what’s touching me, or breathing
    But I know, they will help me achieve feats
    Un-human, feats witch the brains can’t contract
    Slowly, they pull me towards the alien craft

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    91% of people who've been abducted believe they have a tracking device implant.

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    Day breaks.

    My pillow is bloody, my nose is running with snot
    The root of my soul rots, but I feel stronger in awe
    The longer I stop to think what happened before
    I am startled, to hear a brief tap at the door

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    “Good Morning” the men were dressed in black suits
    “There is no time to explain” as they came unto
    My house, dressed me, and led me to a vehicle
    It was black like their suits, this automobile, steel
    Doors, doubled, thick, bomb resistant – I’m unaware
    And when I get nervous, I shake with terror
    Two pills popped, I’m feeling some comfort inside
    People were waving, It was a comfortable ride

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    71% of alien abducties are open to the 'aliens' And are also open to an unknown 'change'

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    WE stop.

    A back door is open, a woman is waiting
    She says “follow” and I follow facing
    Many men, they all shake my hand
    My hearts racing, London, England, Japan
    Every race, as I walk, slowly pacing
    She points to a curtain, then briskly retreats
    “Where is it”
    “WHERE IS WHAT?”
    “The speech Mr. President, The speech”
    “WHAT! What speech – ”
    “Sir You are delusional, the press-“
    “WAIT!” I feel into my pockets with stress
    I felt my pocket.. I felt what was detained
    I pulled out a paper, My nostrils inflamed

    “I.. I must have forgot it" I said..
    “she whispered yes.. now hurry ahead
    I pushed forth the curtain, and opened my sheet
    The new leader of the Bush Administration,
    Is ready to speak.

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    Metal objects of unknown origin have been removed from some of the people who've been abductor's bodies.

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    -I never wrote a speech.

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    Throughout this piece I’ve planted several “facts”
    It was your choice to believe them or not…
    But consider… what if I made them up?
    Did you believe, and If you did..
    How easy would it be to blindfold a nation..
    And.. how easy would it be,
    to lead them in the wrong direction?

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    I'll get the links later,
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    Upin.

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    Ray Bradbury:Marionette Inc.

    I see similiarity concepts.Ok let me start off by saying.......Cool topic.Never really seen anyone get too specific in the topic like this,but i enjoyed your topic.It was ok,not that good,but it was cool.The imagery was there,and so was the emotion,just not rnough of it.I also liked the simple vocab.This piece was like a poetic drop,but over all it was ok.
    hurterrybody.

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    thx for the feed, up.

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    i seem u write a piece on aliens b4

    yeah this appeals to me somewhat.. because i am an alien

    rythym and flow was nice in this piece...
    emotion was touched upon in a stern and serious manner..
    structure was strange and alien like so made it an interesting reading


    had sum good raw visual imagery as well
    nice drop put accross well with on point wording

    check out my recent alien writing yeah

    http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=278986

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    word, up.

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    Its pretty dope man good job. Inresting concept/subject too

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