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  1. January 18th, 2006, 11:30 PM #1
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    ~Love~

    Me and Tsunami were on AIM and were gunna drop a verse on a Topic. so i asked a girl and she said "Love". So thats what i did, after i wrote it Tsunami told me to post it here in OM's. So here it is, and this is tha first OM i have posted-


    ~~Love~~


    Thinkin about your life, And tha Conception of pure love in your heart
    To some it might mean to have that special person that u miss when your apart
    TO others it might mean a person on tha side thats only there to fuck
    So as long as they play it like that, later on down tha line in there life there gunna be stuck
    But to me, Love is something more, something that words can not be emotionally expressed
    Its havin and holdin that special girl by your side, then feelin tha joy when shes undressed
    To knowin that you have a partner, someone thats always gunna be there thru tha thick and thin
    There gunna remain by your side and stay loyal weather you lose or win
    But to some guys, Love can mean having a Homie thats always down to Ride for whateva the cause
    If your in trouble there gunna pull out their clips and bust witout hesitation, there is no pause
    All the way to just havin a family member that loves you, that will help rise your soul
    Because we all will learn that in this cruel Society driven world, that havin no love will take a Toll
    To people all across this earth Love means something different in every persons eyes
    Love as in a partner or as in a homie, Its viewed differently between girls and guys
    But one thing that is for sure is that love is something positive, only good can grow
    But what does love mean to you or me?? The answer is Only Time will show



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    1.) http://rapbattles.com/forum/showthre...72#post3827372
    2.) http://rapbattles.com/forum/showthre...53#post3827453
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  2. January 19th, 2006, 04:04 AM #2
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    A lovely concept, the branching out of the idea of love into the hearts of millions. You wrote about platonic love also, so it added a different twist to the usual boyfriend/girlfriend story. You did try to work in some more complex vocabulary, which was evident, but I feel you could have developed this piece alot from your general use of language. Because of the dragged out lines, the piece didn't flow as well as it should of, and that made it a little difficult to really get into and appriciate, but since most of the things I write have elongated lines I'm not gonna be madly hypocritical. Overall, a nice concept that worked in more origional feelings, could have been furthur expanded by the use of unusual wording and the summerising of lines.
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  3. January 23rd, 2006, 03:40 PM #3
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  4. January 27th, 2006, 05:53 PM #4
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  5. January 27th, 2006, 06:29 PM #5
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    Quote Originally Posted by WestBank504
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    westbank thats was emotional, and let the truth be told cuz thats the same way i be feeling holla at fire_gurl
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  6. January 27th, 2006, 06:34 PM #6
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  7. January 27th, 2006, 07:35 PM #7
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    that was really good man i liked how deep it was and the flow was good too keep it up dawg
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  8. February 5th, 2006, 07:58 PM #8
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  9. February 5th, 2006, 10:30 PM #9
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    I wasn't feelin the whole "love" concept you need to elevate on wordplay as well

    Spoke some true shit on few lines but i just wasn't hip to it.
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  10. February 6th, 2006, 12:38 AM #10
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    i liked ur concept cuz it didn't just use the same old couple-luv thing so that was tight.
    i thought u coulda done more with makin it flo tho, so keep workin on it
    it was cool 2 c that u could drop with versatility--it didn't have 2b just UR topic off the top of ur head.
    i liked how u kept the wording simple, so just work on the flo and u'll b aiight.
    keep postin and return the favor...

    Chk my OM "Letter From A Ryder" & leave some helpful feed cuz i'm new to RB

    http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=270190

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  11. February 6th, 2006, 11:27 AM #11
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    i felt that..
    good ideas
    altough i agree you could of done bit more to the flo

    but nice piece like it
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  12. February 6th, 2006, 03:58 PM #12
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    Me and another member did it on AIM at first..so i didnt try to do flow and everything great...Never was gunna put it as an OM until we told me too..So i did...But yuh, Leave Sum Feed

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  13. February 7th, 2006, 04:24 PM #13
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    ya lines were sorta stretched homie but i liked this shit the topic especially. i enjoy reading shit about romance and love type things. you did good with this but your flow is what needs to be worked on more than the rest. every line was tight, everybar... i liked dat
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  14. February 8th, 2006, 10:50 PM #14
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  15. February 11th, 2006, 08:36 PM #15
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