Portrait Of A Goddess (I Miss You)

[Tim]

paint a portrait that portrays the perfection of goddess, Queen-like, angelic..
Calligraffiti shaded, dip the tip into olive, faded brushstrokes, drawn kinetic.
Lines connected, I form an outline, that only the worthiest of Gods can create..
Design the shape of a coke bottle, an hour glass...Legs of a ballet dancer...Plee-yay..
Long And Slender, Shapely, Smooth as Silk And Soft as The Finest Linens..
Make the skin so that it glistens golden...Contour the subtle whims and bends..
The idealistic outs and ins...Glamorous, Yet Naturally Beautified and wondrous..
Grab the brush used for detail, Brush the most gorgeous face amongst us..
Douse the Brush brown with streaks of hazel, And randomly scatter Crystal streaks..
Inside the Shining iris…Divine, Which Brings out the slightest glisten, the bristles speak..
Eyes that trance, Glowing daggers, That sparkle when the sunlight Hits the right angle..
Eyes that entangle a king within the iris'…lightly outlined in black, gleaming like an angels..
Eyelashes, Long and slender, thin but thick...Eyebrows with the Perfect curve..
Only the kind that couldn't be explained within a thousand and one words..
I sit the brush off to the side…And grab a slimmer brush with a slightly long tip..
And Drench the Ends in A ruby red, Take it and demonstrate how to make the lips..
The Stretched out heart across the top lip, The hardly noticeable pout..
Full but in the confines of Reality, The bottom lip slightly subtly sticking out..
Wash the brush…Come back, And soak the bristles into a dark shade of brown..
Begin to swiftly guide my hands creating the hair, Just more than shoulder length, cascading down..
Then I create a tear on the rosy cheeks, To show that this Goddess is human…She cries…
I grab the littlest brush that I have, To Show her that I will dry her eyes…
Because I don't want a goddess that's perfect on the outside, if her inside don't connect..
Instead of a beautiful face, and Graceful body, I want a beautiful intellect..
So I sign the page, Give my creation the greatest mind that I can conceive..
And lift the brush off the canvas, I've painted the ideal goddess finally…
With a halo Above her head Towards her throne, Her seat of everlasting life.
She can't be alone i dread as shes now dead for I painted this goddess as my wife

Bang Bang

[Nostradomus.]

Holy crizzap ronny rizzap, bust a gizzat in ur bizzack. nice job timson.

Tim, ur style is off the charts. You dont talk much smack, so when people underestimate you, you crush them beneath the turf. This peice was very emotional, and the closer helped the whole piece out definitly. Your openor was amazing, and every line made me want to read everything after it. The rhyme scheme was very dope, the vocab u used here was very complex but understandable, so that was good. great piece dog, you'll be getting a nomination for this.

The People > All of you.

[Tim]

http://rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=264443
http://rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=264403

[spitz_shine]

dam,this was some ill shit...
i was fealing it the whole way thru;;
wordplay was sick...overall...solid drop
i liked this alot..peace

[Tim]

thanxs uppin
leave links

[Tim]

uppers

[Monstrous]

Dope.

I liked reading this, it just flowed really smoothly and had a nice vibe to it, you did a good job with your imagery, it was a fun read and that's whjat i think is important, you are consistently ope, and this one is good enough, consider it nominated.

[Cody Nash]

Wow, you are crazy. Your imagination is just so perfect, I'd love to just see what you think about inside your head. I don't have half the imagination as you do yet...You're flow stays steady, you keep on point with a great storyline. Some Twists, some morals. You did real good here. That was Hott...Good job Tim, AGAIN...

Spank it...
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/show...5&page=2&pp=15

[Siege]

http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=264120

this was crazy. you did a great job wit this, so some bars were a little stretched, imagery was awesome, i could see inside your head. excellent piece, flow was on point, a lil stretched at points, but still great. i wont nominate this because it already has been, so hit up my piece Racism, tell me if im good enough to get into SS

[A.O.D]

That is some of the best imagery I've seen in a long time, the vocab made nothing but sense and the ending was unexpected...

Eyelashes, Long and slender, thin but thick...Eyebrows with the Perfect curve..
Only the kind that couldn't be explained within a thousand and one words..

^^^ my favorite line...

PS, lol I was so inspired lol I drew your angel lol...not bad not bad at all...

[Influx]

Wow Tim, this was a really intellectual piece, extremely poetic and spiritual. The use of imagery and in particular, the conceit of colour and the extended metaphor for art was a really inspiring touch. I think the way the persona created someone who was perfect on the outside, but only human - the mention of the tear on her cheek I loved - also gave away something about the artist himself. I almost got the impression that he was using this woman as an escape from his own deep-rooted insecurities. I don't think that will have been your intention, things I notice rarely are, I have a habit of reading too much into things but the sign of a true poet is someone who can turn something which appears literal and simple, into a complex string of ambiguity. I dunno, I think I got alot more from this piece than you intended people too, which I liked.
I can't really say anything about the technical features of the piece, the structure and form, I don't think that really matters much. I think you worked the words you used to your own advantage and the syntax was interchangable. In conclusion, a really inspiring written. Thanks for a great read.

[Lyrical Damage]

yo i was feelin this shit hard body, i didnt like the operner that much but it kept me reading, u had my interest from the beginning to the end, this piece was lovely, out of a ten i give this a 9.5 aight man imma be lookin for more of ur drops aight man good piece. i think this should be nominated but then again im a new commer ehat do i know.