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    Mikey B
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    Stranded In My Thoughts

    alright here's my links
    http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/show...87#post3704887
    http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/show...03#post3704903

    AS THE NIGHT SKY FORMS, THE MOON BECOMES INCIPIENT
    I'VE LOST ALL CAUSE-HOPEFULLY I COULD BE WISDOM'S RECIPIENT
    I WOKE UP FROM A KNIGHTMARE-BUT IT PROVED TO BE TRUE
    STRANDED.......STANDING ALONE WITH AN OCCULANT VIEW
    A DARK SKY OF MYSTERY INCURRS MY VISION
    ALL BEARING'S ARE LOST-WHAT WAS I MISSING?
    NO CLUE WHERE I AM, IT'S ALL UNKNOWN
    LAST THING I REMEMBER WAS HANGING UP THE PHONE
    BUT NOW I'M SURROUNDED IN DARKNESS SO FAR AWAY FROM HOME
    I'M IN A WAR WITH SANITY-AND I'M TRAPPED-GUNLESS AND PRONE
    NOW I CONTEMPLATE THE SITUATION I'VE BEEN GIVEN
    I THINK THE WALL THAT SURROUNDS SANITY HAS BEEN RISEN
    MY MIND COMES UP SHORT OF EVEN A BLANK-I'VE BEEN DERIVEN
    ...SHHH......I HEAR A NOISE IN THE SHADOWS THEN I LISTEN..........
    AND THEN FOR SOME REASON I LOSE MY SENSES GRADUALLY AS THEY FADE
    THE NOISE GETS NEARER-I WOULD RUN BUT MOVEMENT'S BEEN FORBADE
    THEN THE NOISE SHOWS AN APPARENT ORIGINATION
    I SEE THE SIHLOUTTE, THEN I FEEL AN AGONIZING DESPERATION
    SUCH A HORRID FACE...BUT WITH A SENSE OF DESECRATION
    THEN THE CREATURE BEHAVES AS IF MY THOUGHT ARE BEING HEARD
    BUT THIS IS ABSURB........I SWEAR I HAVEN'T SPOKE A WORD
    BUT EVERYTIME I HAVE A THOUGHT THE CREATURE FADES MORE
    THEN MY HEAD STARTS SPINNING LIKE MY MIND'S WGED WAR
    WHEN I COMPOSE MY SELF TO LOOK-THE SREATURE IS GONE
    THEN- THE DARK SKY FADES INTO A ESCAPADE OF DAWN
    THEN MANY MORE FEARFUL BEINGS SPAWN
    BUT THERE'S SOMETHING CONTRARE- ABOUT THE SIGHT OF THE AIR
    A WONDERFUL MORNING SKY WIT EVEIL BEINGS EVRYWHERE
    SO I SEARCH HERE AND THERE-TO FIND HOW TO GET BACK TO MY NORMAL AFFAIRS
    I FOUND NO ESCAPE, BUT THE CREATURES DISSAPEAR DENTING MY COMPOSURE
    EVIL ERADICATION SEEMS TO COMPLICATE MY CLOSURE

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    that was good... but in another way i know that sucks.. not talkin bout the rhymin just the content.. just cause i have experienced that shit.. and fuck it!

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    upp 1-cmon sum replys plz...............................

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    Iunno what to say....That ish was dope like usual homie....imagery and creativeness was bomb.....nothin else to say...nice drop

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    nominate it den plz............................................... ........*)

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    upp 2..................cmon mo feed plz------------------------

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    cool shit
    http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php/its-alive-356519.html[/url]

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    nice drop
    gd flow
    gd imagery
    mainly excellent rhymin but bit simple on a couple of occasions
    showd ur skills
    keep @ it man, this ws a nice drop
    Don't Do Drugs EP is coming soon.

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    thnx fam- and wassup wit bloods- dat nigga aint bewen seen in a cool ass minute yo-
    N e ways-thnx

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    WHY ALL THE CAPITALS MAYNE?..... ITS KIND OF HARSH ON THE EYES YOU KNOW




    has some dope vocabs and nice quotes throughout this piece still tho fosho...maybe a couple spelling errors here and there..but w/e.. its a decent read and you mos def proped it with some good dark imagery...starangely thios verse has tones of something i just started working on at the moment which i'm hoping will be a hot collabo with another siite member.. in which im speaking of some creatures as well.. so this verse stood out to me as something i could relate to image-wise..



    i think maybe you do with a few more multies.. and tighten the consistancy of flow some more... AND CUT THE CAPS

    PZ


    oh yea check out this joint if u aint already yeah

    http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=259790
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