A Beggers Life.

[Po']

A Beggers Life.

I swore to hold the key, but now, its slowly folding see..
As I make, "Im hungry," signs from leftovers thrown at me..
Theres no way out of here, and life’s, not about to clear..
A life supply of water, only when I count my tears..
Be brave, announce my fears, and sigh cause I need help..
But today was a good day..
..................................A whole sidewalk to myself!
So much pain, and loneliness, but see, im phony, shit
As I grab the mic and think, "what if,"..
.....................................But why am I holding this?
Theres no future in me, and no, theres no future you see..
This world will come to an end, as a future of greed..
Money makes the man? No, more like money makes the type..
Of guy to be an asshole, but money makes my life..
Nothing in myself, I plead on the street, no dollar still..
I don’t even have a pocket, to hold a dollar bill..
All I ask is for a dollar, im so sick, of poverty..
Saying my prayers
.......................And I wouldn’t mind hitting the lottery

..

Because..
Life’s so hard at times, and yes its hard at times..
But my only future holds, how well I smart these rhymes..
Theres nothing in life, and no, nothing you can accomplish..
I need to make as much of it.. So Im not about to stop shit..

..

Life’s so hard at times, and yes its hard at times..
But my only future holds, is how well I smart these rhymes..
Theres nothing in life, and no, nothing you can accomplish..
But I need to make as much of it.. So Im not about to stop shit..

..

Its not money, no, no money at all, its funny you called..
I couldn’t answer!, so no, it wasn’t funny at all..
Life’s not worthy, and all it does is fucking hurt thee..
As a life like this is not meant…
.........................For a man who just hit thirtie..
I fear that Im doomed, its clear, I fear of my tome..
But I know this is a dream..
..........................Lord, please make it clear up soon
Im sick of this shit, sick of this bitch, sick of my own shit..
Im sick of everything! Everything is just sick..
I don’t know what to do, no mom, for holding you..
Its hard growing up..
......................When clouds are what to look up to..
Im badly divorced, dumped on the street, sadly poor..
The only one who turned out like this, in a family of four..
Im dumb a ton, or even worse, I guess Im just some scum..
The type of person people laugh at..
..........................................No more than a bum..
This is just gay for heavens sake, a day I’ll never make..
So I’ll just lie right here in the ally..
.................................And pray that I’ll never wake

RIP: Mark Ujean Murphey.

[Po']

Links:
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/show...24#post3629524
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/show...=255653&page=1

[Po']

Slept on.

["lil Neefy"]

Wow Po. This piece had amazing imagery. I mean, i had a mental picture going from about... line 2. Very descriptive and indepth which is very good. Your emotion in this piece was very heartfelt. Especiallly the ending when you said RIP it makes it all seem so much more powerful. Your structure was on point about the whole way through. And the hooks, well, they were kinda hooks. Very nice vocabulary aswell man. I've seen more colorful of vocab but you dont need a over-kill of big words to give a piece some flavor.

My favorite 2 lines were.....

Theres no way out of here, and life’s, not about to clear..
A life supply of water, only when I count my tears..

Those strong beginnings really set the pace for a well thought out and good piece. I would love to see more work from you in the future w/ this much emotion and imagery. Keep up the good work and hit the aim for a collab.

stay up!

[Po']

Thanks alot man.

[Duval]

OMFG!! I really loved this. The emotion, wow, the emotion. I loved this. The flow, the structure, the lines. Everything was pretty much on point! The imagery, I saw everything in my mind

Nothing in myself, I plead on the street, no dollar still..
I don’t even have a pocket, to hold a dollar bill..
^^ I loved that.

The whole 2nd part had me in awe. Good fuckin job.

Stay up, and keep dropping.

[Po']

*Blushes*

Thanks alot.

[Po']

Up.

[Po']

Faggots.

[Spekz]

Po this was trully amazing, and it deserves miss's nomination no doubt!
the thing that i never noticed about u b4 is u have a way with words that is unlike a lot of writers....like some lines seem so simple, yet they are so complex in meaning/emotions/imagery....just u word that so well they make ya just go wow! there is very little flaw in this piece at all..it is so intense, and real in so many ways.....
.....this piece brought a new appreciation towards u....and i respect u more than ever!

FAV-LINES!

Theres no way out of here, and life’s, not about to clear..
A life supply of water, only when I count my tears..
Be brave, announce my fears, and sigh cause I need help..
But today was a good day..
..................................A whole sidewalk to myself!
^^1st bar, was full of imagery...2nd bar was such a reality check!so real!

Nothing in myself, I plead on the street, no dollar still..
I don’t even have a pocket, to hold a dollar bill..

^^again so real!


MUH RESPECT MAN...KEEP UPS!!

(po + speks = collab dope! )

[Tragic]

This was pretty nice stuff, i liked a couple of bars more them others like this one
"All I ask is for a dollar, im so sick, of poverty..
Saying my prayers
.......................And I wouldn’t mind hitting the lottery"

the flow was on point through out the whole verse, the chourus i thought was unnecessary but thats only about one flaw, and i had to give some contructive critisicm otherwise it aint feedback so yea this was tight, hit my OM up in my sig

[Tragic]

theres my links up in my sig.

[Po']

Alright thanks.

[Percept]

great imagery, exceleent flow, good structure.... that helped the flow flowwise, the emotion in this was also great, topic was played by a mslal bit, but still nicee,

Nothing in myself, I plead on the street, no dollar still..
I don’t even have a pocket, to hold a dollar bill..
Theres no way out of here, and life’s, not about to clear..
A life supply of water, only when I count my tears..

wow.....

great job

[Po']

Thanks.