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    Why I Hate My Grandma? F/ Shawn P.

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    Every sine I was young the bitch been making my life hesitant
    Treated other kids better than me they wasn’t even a resident
    Bitched about everything even tried to choke me up on the wall
    Kept calling me a dumb bitch so I flipped and punched er in her jaw
    She never gave a fuck about my feelings she said I had no feeling
    When she had company and something ended up missin she sweared I was stealing
    The day I ran away I was thinking should I just for ever run away?
    The bitch stated she wanted me out her house why the fuck would I stay?
    shawn-
    She was Drunk 24/7, she had all types of wine and liquor
    Every loud word she spoke to me my anger grew intensely quicker
    Thought I was scared but I never let her words offend me
    somebody else tried to say something about me, bitch didn’t defend me
    cousins came to visit wanted to embarrass me saying I pissed in the bed
    when I walked pass her bedroom door I had thought of bustin a brick to her head!
    jazz-
    Ages 8 through 9 lived with her because my mama was mentally ill
    Had no sympathy for the world my heart was too scarred to heal
    Hated her for her acts why did she have to drink like that?
    Made me so mad I had to go in her purse and steal a stack
    Didn’t let me have phone calls either neither did she let me have fun
    honest to god i would put her to sleep if i had a gun
    tired of her treating me wrong, im supposed to be her granddaughter
    she will finally understand its her fault when im in jail for man slaughter
    shawn-
    out that knife to my mama head i umped on er brought the bitch down
    people stay with the wondering thought of why ma face scarred wit a frown
    i put er jail one day the police put er in the back of that car
    i didnt give a fuck i just watched hoping they would take da bitch far
    when gettin in trouble at school took the teahes side ova mine
    now that im older i might kill er and do my sad doing time

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    You need to leave 2 links to 2 open mics you've left decent feedback on or this will get closed. Thanks.

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    okay yo i did that shit now uppin for feed on thiz

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    you need to get the links and post them in apost in your thread.....
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    Poetry

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    Originally Posted by Vamp.
    this is perhaps the gayest thread...ALIVE....

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    i found these couple lines a bit confusing

    put er jail one day the police put er in the back of that car

    now that im older i might kill er and do my sad doing time


    needs rewording and sorting somehow

    all in all a pretty decent and dark piece which does have some suspense to the story and some good images.. i just think it could of been worded better in places.. and the vocab could of been a bit wider...format was ok in poetical sense.. maybe a smaller font would of tightened it up for the page though... plus wordplay could be upped a bit more to give a more original feel to it


    very decent piece still

    keep it up yo

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    Read the stickied thread at the top of Open Mic if you dont know how to post links.

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