Violence, Drugs, Bitches

[Violents]

Hook
Whats the game about?
Violence, Drugs And Bitches
Sirens, Thugs and Snitches
Iron, Slugs, and Stiches
We aint about
Cryin, Hugs and Kisses
We supplyin Buggin Bitches
Cookin in the fuckin kitchen


Im cookin candy up like a wonka factory
The pitch on your strip is unsatisfactory
they dont love your product, they think you cut your produt
to damn much, so the fiends is liek fuck your product
oo you from downtown?, well, i thought you lived in the flats
but i aint drivin from the slopes for a 10 bag of crack (you crazy)
i got weight, and i aint trippin for a dime sack
Broadway and 122nd thats where the crimes at
My weed money, i call it Green Beans
I work with more water then a swim team
Fiends sniff my coke like its supposed to be in they nose
they give me head, for the rock and then i pee in they nose
I only give rock for cash, you give ride for rock
and you cant expect me to be stupid i supply the block
if i get locked yall fiends wud be fucked in this part of P-town
but the nigga JT in the FLats will hold me down

Hook
Whats the game about?
Violence, Drugs And Bitches
Sirens, Thugs and Snitches
Iron, Slugs, and Stiches
We aint about
Cryin, Hugs and Kisses
We supplyin Buggin Bitches
Cookin in the fuckin kitchen

If you aint rappin gangsta daddy, whatchu talkin about
im on the strip flossin about, you cautionin out
Niggas lookin to fuck you up in your own hood
these poems you intenet niggas spitin is no good
im here to fuck you up, i aint here to make friends
the cake ends, never, im rollin up and bakin
I Heat pigs up liek i was cookin up bacon
crack im makin, im so amazin
i run this whole strip off broadway im the slopes my self
i aint need no partna nigga i sell the dope my slef
and i- am the dope myself, cuz when i spit
these niggas cant control theyself
im gettin pussy like a hungry Dog
and they wanna know why im still slingin (im a hungry dog)
i move around with the hammers indeed
long clips, so in the stash is bananas and cream

[~SMOKE~]

Hot Shit Keep It Up!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

[flavin]

u need to work on ur shit a lot. the structure was kinda fucked up and you said "you" about once or twice a line so work some of those out. in places it seemed not to flow together to well and this subject is getting old its been done a lot of times so u need to come up with a more creative subject. work on all ur basic shit and elevate

[Cody Nash]

Wow ummm...I was like this is going to be dope after that willy wonka line...but then it completely lost my interest...You lost your subject and completely fell apart...Your structure didn't suit my fancy either...Wordplay was good...(on the first verse...)...You need a lot of work...Keep dropping and lengthen your wordplay/vocab...You had 3 subjects to write about in one open mic so you sort of trailed off...you really need to use one subject since your just starting open mics...Maybe one subject you could get some better Wordplay...Keep spitting and elevate...PEACE...

[Mista Loc]

Maybe if you recorded it nigga but on theez sitez niggaz get to analyze your lyricz word for word and take their leisure on it so you gotta bring that sickness every line, aint no denying it son so just try to make everyline that hot fiyah and niggaz will like it alot better. alright son breathe easy.

[Violents]

http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/show...=1#post3101887

[conquistador]

okaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaay...I felt you nigga. You made me a believer. I smiled the whole time I read ya rhyme because that was me last year. I like your flow....you are street and convincing....keep ya head up boy it's gonna get better as soon as you save up 9.5 and get half a brick

[warchild]

The hook was the nicest thing about this piece, the verse flowed well but it was just the usual thug drug tales they get boring but it could of been better if you mixed in some better metaphors and punchlines. Work on that and your verse should get better. decent piece.

Return the feed:
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=229664

[Jake Bills]

subject is played but u did it up nicely

[Violents]

okaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaay...I felt you nigga. You made me a believer. I smiled the whole time I read ya rhyme because that was me last year. I like your flow....you are street and convincing....keep ya head up boy it's gonna get better as soon as you save up 9.5 and get half a brick

good looks nigga i get a brick for 16 i been had half bricks... il lholla nigga 1

[Violents]

get some mo feed