.:Light it up:.{SS verse}

[K9_THESHIT]

Light it up





Sleepless nights distort the serene dimensions of space,
Mute stillness as lights transport the clean reflections of a far-away place..
The silence dilutes the thoughts inside my mind,
Insane artistic pursuits subside and hide..
A sadistic pain pollutes my brain as different vissions collide,
A new realistic perception of art flows in my veins from tonight..
..Because its all in vain if art doesn't portray the grotesque essence of the world,
Artist fail to mimic the decay and infest the present with their words..
Its absurd..Lyrics of love are such a cliche,
They fail to display the barbaric soul of humanity,
The way they crawl in a bouquet of inanity,
Because art stiles elude the cruel perceptions of reality,
Misconceptions towards the sublime exclude the beauty in barbarity..
But I can see art mime the crude nature of life,
In rhyme I shall imbue vissions of death in the human mind,
I shall revive the deprived essence of life in art,
I shall strive to recreate horror in the human heart..
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Light it up!
..
Go shadows in the night..ignite mighty Rome in flames,
Tonight, I shall write a poem in the name of this bane...
..
Burn Rome,burn!Just like a Phoenix,art shall rise from your ash..
Burn fires,burn!You're muse to my lyrics, engulf God's trash..
Ahh..The perfume of scorched earth and flesh in the fumes is so complete,
Bodies are torched on the dirt and ash,being consumed by the heat,
And while true art is forged as I speak, cliche art being entombed in defeat..
My art is now fueled by the cries of those in a deplorable fate,
Imbued with the demise of those crawling in a horrible state,
And what i now create conveys the esoteric torment in the soul of humanity,
Portrays the barbaric decent from divine to insanity..

Sacrifices were made to enlighten art,
..I had to light it up.

[EyeBite]

damn, this was really good... the rhymes were great for this drop, the topic was interesting and enjoyable to read, flow was good, strucutre was good, not perfect but still very very good, overall this was really good, also known as about 8.5/10, great job and keep it up, keep droppin

[K9_THESHIT]

http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/show...40#post2998340
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/show...3&page=2&pp=15

Thanks for the feed.And yeah my structure is messy.I'm just gangsta that way.

[EyeBite]

Thanks for the feed.And yeah my structure is messy.I'm just gangsta that way.

i'm feelin that, same here

[Maven.]

^LMAO

I liked this a lot...it reminded me of Nero...you know, the Roman Emporer who was fucking nuts, and neglected his duties and burned Christians, and while Rome was burning down, he was playing the fiddle. He was obsessed with creating art...and I saw a huge aspect of that in this piece. The want to actually portray human nature in writing. The content was nice, man, I really enjoyed the read.
I'm not exactly sure what to suggest...writing "a scream:" before the light it up thing was kind of stupid, and I don't really get it when people write pieces like they're subtitles on tv for deaf people. Or rather...closed captioned for the hearing impaired. It's weird.

Good piece.

[Johnny 6-feet]

poetic man, just plain poetic. A good take on the topic, i guess you have a thing for ancient rome, huh? The vocab was strong although i think just a fraction too strong. The imagery was great, as usual. The flow was a little off in places but the rhyme scheme wasn't. A good piece.

Def Poets

[K9_THESHIT]

Thanks Maven and Johnny...And yeah i got inspired from Nero.Didn't mention his name,because my character was insane like him,but my character was also inteligent as an artist,while Nero was not.

[Twic]

i liked this... i thought you took an original take on the topic and suprised the fuck outa me... looking at your namei thought o just another whack new guy... but this was accualy pretty good... put a pretty good picture in my mind and you where quite poetic the way you wrote this. great peice... keep up the elevating man...

check out one shot... when yah got some time...

[sILLable]

very strong piece....emotionaly..tight imagery...wordplay and vocab...p[retty much every aspect of this piece..i liked this piece alot..im not at all surprised it was tight...tha pieces you drop normaly are....keep droppin these solid pieces as usual..~1`

[K9_THESHIT]

Thanks Twixn and Treazon.And Treazon...if you think it's that solid...nom it for hof

[K9_THESHIT]

upp

[K9_THESHIT]

stop sleeping

[.Silence.]

I really like this piece from you.I was really feeling the storyline in your verse.And I also felt the emotion in your verse too.Even though your structure was kind of messed up it was still good.And I think I saw a lil bit of Imagry too in this piece.Also the vocabulary and wordplay were good in this piece.You did really good on this piece homie I really like it keep up the good work.If you get a chance leave feedback in my OM thanks

[K9_THESHIT]

stop saying about my structure.who sais lines have to even?

but thanks for the feed.

[TProphet]

Very nice

Tha charecter of this piece was put across impressivly from you,

They say your structure was a flaw in this piece.. but i didnt notice because of how intrigued i was,

Everything in this piece was on point

Dope,

rtf?
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=224903