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Thread: To The Father I Never Knew(MUST READ)

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    To The Father I Never Knew(MUST READ)

    To The Father I Never Knew:

    (Collab)

    Glory
    To the Father I never had, and the stories you never told
    The bond we’ll never have, and home she’ll never know


    Sleep mother sleep, mourn not for what confides within
    As we lay rest to memories and forge locks to silent sins
    If not my mind listens, and ponders upon what is missed
    Yet all is said and done, it goes not to what does not exist
    To God its not but is, but we are shot so lets not forgive
    Created in our father’s image I’m not but I mock what is
    Subtract a man from Jesus, a man’s not what you see its…
    An empty picture of a figure of men who’ll never be him
    Its treason, worth himself a man more or less is wretched
    With regret it, still remains at best an unmissed conception
    As I’ve wept with to accept what’s kept as a brisk infection
    Is that what you expect in, an undeserved birth to step in
    A masquerade of moral lesson to test if my depths intrepid
    Just get this, I am more a man than you beyond any meaning

    Camrok
    & it's being this fact, seeing your act, from season to season
    my depths of knowledge grows, from your lack - and I reason
    to make amends of a face, but not to the bond misplaced..
    or never was, ever existed is a lie graved to your disgrace
    To say, your were not a man, is in fact, it is what it is..
    God & your soul knows, a man of wholesome faith was risen
    Given from a seed, not meant to succeed, but secede a missing..
    As I twisted to the right side, cause the wrong meant a prison
    A man of honest values, family treasure, morals rated one..
    not one to seclude himself, fate to escape - leave his only son
    As an additive, I last to live, and create, a man of relations..
    & subtract, a fault altered mistake.. to make just imagination
    A creation of something, so profound, twas that you eluded..
    A real man, from the seed of a man, much more well suited.

    To the son I'll always have, the stories you'll forever know
    The bond we'll always have, and love last forever shown.
    Last edited by Glory; August 8th, 2005 at 10:12 PM


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    Last edited by CAMROK; August 8th, 2005 at 10:59 PM
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    i reply to two aswell, so that makes 4 for the heck of it.

    drop feed on this kats. much appreciated. i haven't dropped in months.

    peACE


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    this shit was nice. you both came dope. it was reallly deep n both ya flows n structures were sick.both u guys were complex n u had good vocab.i especially like the beginning and ending thing u guys did. that was dopee... big up...gj on this

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    very dope...imagery..wordplay..genius...vocab and complexity were mos def there....i liked tha creativity and your use of multis in this...very intricate piece i think....both came very dope....keep droppin tha hottnes.~1~


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    Diz collab wit ya'll 2 was excellent. Both of ya'll had good vocabulary, structure, flow, wordplay, emotion, n complexity. I actually read it 3 times cuz i liked it a lot. Crazy drop right here. Keep em comin. 1

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    thank ya fellas.. up for more.
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    this piece was fucking ill man... wow...
    Great vocab, imagery, and structure all together...
    this was in everyway a great peice... something to be proud off....
    I had a picture in my head of what you described... yet, it wasnt described like how one might do so explaining a painting to someone, it was spirtual.... a great verse. Yall need to be elite
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    Word. This was dope, the wordplay is excently and is one the flow of the peice is hot. You guys had good vocab and it wasnt basic or either. Hot Drop.

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    thanks, up.
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    thanks to uyou kats who replied to this. leave more and leave links if ya want us to return feed.


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    again. leave some please.


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    HoT hOt!!! shit, only positive shit to say bout this piece... basically perfect, gr8 collab, wicked wordplay awsome structure.... i loved it, keep dropping da hoTnEsS!!!
    GuD Work

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    *speechless* WOAH...deep shit homies...keep it up, i like readin every1's shit now, im just really started 2day and im likin it, ill be checkin things out more often now. peace

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    Damnit, it was better than mine. Now I have to bring out the big guns.

    Dope ass collab. I really liked it, and you guys did a really good job on it. Props to you guys. You incorperated the descriptive language, and evolved the story, and put great emotion into it. That was a dope drop.

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