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    [Po'Ethics Collab] - Reach for the stars.

    Po'Ethics
    Reach for the stars.





    From the firing pits known as the depths of hell
    embarking upon an untimely journey
    to reach certain greatness, that sparkling wealth
    reach for the stars, for that holy atmosphere
    Fighting all the evil
    no matter the viciousness that may appear
    you resemble a warrior
    in which the evil represents the doubters
    keep battling through thick and thin
    use all your will power
    you possess to fight off the bad from with in
    nothing can stop you
    no matter how mean they look or seem
    your possessed with valor
    fight until you make it, never run
    ignore the dragon
    and the more powerful you will become

    Reach for the stars,
    even if you get hurt...

    A dreamer's mind collides,
    in the gutters of your lonely thoughts.
    Morbid fists let loose, welcoming your soul,
    as horrific colors blend into a portrait.
    An innocent bystander, bland in personality
    compared to the scene around him.
    Brushstrokes of enigmatic colors blind
    him from the danger that surrounds.
    Clenched in the open hand of God.
    Feeling so free, yet unable to escape.
    God's hand hoists him up to his highest
    and most unpredictable expectations.
    He reaches for the stars...
    Gives his hope to catch his dreams,
    even though the monster within
    is clearly visible to take it all away.
    He takes the risk for a better day
    with the tightly stinging jaws of
    reality waiting to clench his weak mind.
    But what is beauty without pain?
    Forgetting about the blood drenched walls,
    the morbid hand of God on which he stands,
    and the monster of his soul hanging above him,
    lurking for the chance to take away his dreams,
    He reaches for the stars.
    Will he catch his dreams? Or will everything slip away?
    One does not know the outcome until he tries...

    Reach for the stars,
    even if you get hurt...

    Verse 1 - Kaotic Theory
    Verse 2 - Quist`
    Last edited by Bloomquist; July 26th, 2005 at 01:01 AM

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    Word...replies will be appreciated, and also returned.

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    damn really feelin this. KT you did a good job first actual poem ive read by you but i really felt yall were similiar to each other only thing different was the vocab kt you did good nice emotion good choice of words you kept it simple n good nice imagery just a nice part from you quist good job as well you more up wit the vocabulary but as well your emotion was good and as was your imagery very good piece from both of you nice simple fast read that flowed very nicely

    quist can you rtf in my om Standing and falling on my own.

    thanks 1

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    Thanks paranoid, I appreciate the feedback. I'll try to hit up your Open Mic later tonight.


    More feedback please?

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    Both of you worked really well together to make this a smooth read. You both have similar styles, well enough of a similarity that this came together really well. The picture paints a thousand words even before you begin, then your piece just compliments that...Really good job.

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    Wow, that is an amazing drawing...you two also painted very intriguing pictures with your words..nice collab, very thought provoking and inspiring.
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    Damn guys this has to be one of the best collabs I've seen in awhile... This will mos def be nominated... Kaotic I liked your verse alot it was real nice and I had a good time reading it alot... I liked the flow that you had it was real nice and mellow... Your vocab was straight and your meanings were good... Bloom personally in my eyes you are one of the best poets to grace this bored and I'm glad that I have had the pleasure of working with you and this right here was just another step up the ladder I really was feeling this mayne... But both of you did a real nice job and the chemistry was there mos def... Good drop...

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    Wow...praise I dont deserve.

    But thanks so much man. I appreciate it.

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