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    Crossing the Psycho's Path

    Don't worry miss, i'll protect your son with my kung fu
    Then I told the thief, too...
    Power to my fist, the tight grip on my sword stung who?
    You

    Mauricio!
    Says the teacher who stares at me like some creature
    She woke me up from a strange dream with a feature
    Of myself as a hero with a sword, tired cuz i'm bored
    Feeling like my brain poured out when the time stored
    Bullied in class by my fake friends, I can't save them
    I'm sitting at this desk waiting, can't this day end?
    The rain danced as I left the school, malested fool
    Pissed on by the rest cuz I won't respect the cool
    I walk home to my parents argueing, my heart'll bring
    No effect, they just yell like there's no larger things
    I hate to see this, so I walk out to find jesus
    Cuz his piss will see this, as my mind decreases
    Then the sign increases, I saw when I left my projects
    This thug from my school, he says: run them pockets
    I'm standing drunk to my eye sockets: what-chu-muh-callet
    I couldn't speak or think right, so I gave him my wallet
    He grinned and snuffed me, he tried to be rough, see
    Feared by his custies, he felt he needed my money
    As I sobered up, I realized how shook I must of looked
    My doe stolen, fuck, I just let myself get cooked
    I must escape the slums, I heard a mighty sound
    I must find it now, so I ran far away to chinatown
    As I roamed these strange streets, I entered stores
    With twenty bucks to spend, I remembered swords
    And that's what they sold as weapons for people
    Funny, cuz they would sell swords, but knives are illegal
    So at least for my getaway, i'll cop one for protection
    Against any unfair intentions like the U.S. elections
    After buying this sharp object, cops is staren at me wrong
    They must be thinking: he might be carryen a bomb
    I laugh at the thought, even though half of it's caught
    In the idea that i'm hated by the trash on the block
    So I only wonder while the thunder hits the cement
    A week has passed with my blunder's hidden relent
    I'm a homeless teenager, so I want to release anger
    Back in midtown, afterschool battle with a beast danger
    No one's seen me in a while, so fuck leanen with a smile
    I'm searching for the thief who deaded me to be foul
    And then through the crowd of students, I see him
    Robbing some eight year old kid for a stupid reason
    In front of his mom, even, so my drunk ass interferes
    I shall defeat him, a hero who won't burst into tears
    He can not fight the rath...................................
    ..................................Crossing the phycho's path
    So I turned to the eight year old's mother, nodded my head
    I didn't want to see her suffer, police cars came and I said

    Don't worry miss, i'll protect your son with my kung fu
    Then I told the thief, too...
    Power to my fist, the tight grip on my sword stung who?
    You
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    You spelled psycho wrong

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    ^ha, thanks I guess.
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    Quote Originally Posted by Mantra
    You spelled psycho wrong
    I corrected it.
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    Dope, a great topic with exactly the right pace, good vocab and solid multi's throughout. The imagery you used set the scene perfectly and kept me reading until the end. The hook was functional and i like how it took on a more sinister meaning at the end of the piece. Also, i really like swords! Great piece. I'm nominating this one.

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    ^thanks.
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    that was pretty dope
    i was feelin it
    good shit man keep it comin
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    Elemental this piece was real nice I was digging the whole thing... The storyline was real nice... I liked the flow and the multies alot they were really good... The imagery and description were real to the point and nice... The vocab was also a plus that made this piece even better...

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