Confronting the Enemy

[Rex]

I take a puff of this, inject, man, this high is like no other
And I lie dormant in bliss, knowing I'd trade my own mother
For a blast like this, some heroin pumping through my veins
The morphine in my body, changing and stimulating my brain
As I lose my train of thought, I see colors swirl, no purpose
True happiness unfurled, no troubles, no problems to hurt this
I know I was supposed to go to work today, know I have a baby
In the bedroom, screaming, but tonight, the cries won't faze me
My eyes will just blaze, see, first I have to look out for myself
The drugs are good for my health, can't always focus on wealth
Can't always worry about being rich, the stress is too much
Can't waste time thinking either, that's a place I won't touch
Can't face my wife right now, that bitch simply doesn't matter
Neither does the fact I do crack with hepatitis in the bladder
And the satisfaction seizes me, clearly the toxication pleases me
The attraction of rapture from the drugs, it captures and teases me
And reason be damned to Hell, I'm getting the experience, well
It's worth the cancer spreading, I'm beheaded by dealers who sell
He rises, surprised by the mirror, snot-covered face in the night
Only his eyes show a soul confronting the enemy...

and losing the fight

[Rex]

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[Facts Machine]

Emotion was felt and it was easy to read because it flowed well... ussually you come strecthed with a nice rhymescheme... but now it wasn't stretched and it still had a nice rhymescheme. The vocab was put in well and the concept was interesting. The edning was hot and i felt the poetry of this verse. The imagery was nice and you came detailed. Not too long or not too short... pretty solid piece with a good message.
Peace.

[Spoken Deity]

the imagry was great... you came at the topic VERY WELLL... i loved it...
you had great flow too...flawless structure... great emotion... i wish you could stay so i could read more shit... this is elite shit... great man.... god damn...

I guess i liked it so much because i felt you wrote fom experiance....
everything you did in some way created an emotions... its like... a great movie... gladiator for example... it brings out many STRONG emotions that make you react a certain way to the to topic... you're peice did just that... im not 100% why but it did... incredable....

[Laureate]

I thought that this was an ok piece...not your best by far
however....
Some lines were a bit long....but I liked the overall story...
the concept was a bit played....however I liked how you
ended it.....i thought the emotion and imagry were well
done....emotion was better....overall this was a
decent piece

[Swift Death]

i liked the imagery... not bad peice here at all... i thought it could of flowed a little better... you know with some more multies... but i was still a great peice...

good work.

[Born To Kill]

Wow...

This was a horribly depressing story about a wussy faggot of a man.

Real nice descriptions of how far an addict will go.

But damn, now I'm down...BITCH!

Good flow, nice vocab...all that.

But shit, your view of this was like watching Requiem for a Dream or The Boost...

You can almost cop a visual of your character's pathetic life and habits...
Even down to him probably pissing himself when he's really wasted cuz of his bladder problems...and the fuckhead don't care...as long as he's high, he's cool with it.
Shit...his baby could be dying, he wouldn't care.

Nice job describing something so bleak.

I'm impressed.

Peace

[Rex]

LOL... Thanks, BTK.

And the satisfaction seizes me, clearly the toxication pleases me
The attraction of rapture from the drugs, it captures and teases me

Damn, now that I read it over, this is the best part, rhymescheme wise.

[Script]

i liked this piece alot i have to admit i havent seen much of your work but i like this it contained great imagery you can see clearly how pathetic this man trully is very nice piece rex great read keep it up

[Deviate]

BTK described my feelings about this well... I thought the emotion here was strong, the depressing outlook added to it, making it an entertaining read. However, this was by no means the best I've seen from you... You wrote well here, but I know you can do better. I'm more of a fan of the complex, surreal OMs, but I enjoy reading verses like this as it describes life, the way it is... I think you captured the essence of a weak human mind well here... I look forward to your next more complex piece...

[u n r e a L]

wow.

just wow.

i think everyone just stated how good of a peice this is. i really enjoyed the read, thanks.

[Rezen]

nice peice god.
could have been longer.
but great imagery and structure.
also i loved the closing line. It showed this dude was human and not heartless although he puts drugs first.
it was a nice flip on the concept, stretched to the point that the enemy is the guy himself.
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[Err0r]

whoa. very nice imagery, and rhymescheme.

I think everyone explained how i feel about this, it was overall sick.
Every bar kept me thinking, and knowing his thoughts. Nice drug addiction details
by reading the title, i thought it would be different, nice on coming non-straight foward.

Overall, very nice man, i hope to see more

Pz.