sunshine to rain, sparrow turns to crane

[Split]

I'll take a look
at the spectrum with a wild glance
view my child dance
knowing it's a product of this love and romance
you've got a chance
to view the progression of my decisions
my obsession with forgiveness
has made me a poor witness...
to the facts...
laugh if you will, master your skills
though my conscience screams shrill
i'm still tasked with the kills...
build???
upon what?
a foundation of broken dreams?
a nation of smokin teens?
the humiliation that hopin' brings?
so it stings...
on and on, i'll sing my songs
cha-ching? ehh.. wrong..
my summer flings still going strong...
gone...
where the hell did my mind go?
out with the pain,
and time
has taught me that it's all fine, so...
i..............
took an expeditionary step over the boundary
crossed the waters of the land,
continued until they found me...
drowning
in a pool of forgotten memories
sent to me,
in a fitful rage for the centuries...
mistakes, wait, break that
change the thinking cap
range the drinking stats
and feign this stinking rap
...my disdain for this crap...
has finally caught up to me
ruggedly tugging me
mustering what i must to be...
the next ingredient in this melting pot
the walls are caving in
damn whoever told me that i'd like this spot
it's hot, i'd rather remain cold
bold in soul, never allow myself to be contained and controlled
but i'll roll
with the punchs you munchkins throw in my direction
perfections a misconception
and should only be viewed with discretion
correction...
the flaws we all scrutinize
that brutalize our ego's
when viewed through the right eyes,
could be seen as quite regal..
evil..
is as evil does
the steeple dips, but for a minor buzz
in the population...
times are changin,
so why would religion be safe from the situation...
face it,
replace it
do whatever you do,
when severed from the truth,
it always finds it's way back to you...

[nolonger]

2 links man or it gets closed.

[spokenoh]

upon what? a foundation of broken dreams?
a nation of smokin teens?
the humiliation that hopin' brings?

I really liked those lines. You had excellent meter, and had a emotional tone to it. I think I am nominating this. You're a talented writer, you always have been. Nice to see you writing poetry again, on the introspective tip. Peace.

Dedicate

[Split]

http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/show...=1#post2453798
spoken origami- dedicated

some guy who's name i don't remember- sheep to the system
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/show...=1#post2453808

[Vicious Breed]

good emotion nice lines sounded like a poem or is it suppose to be? anyways nice

[Split]

lets just say it poetic?

[CONcept]

lol well it was long but sorta of entertaining well keep droppin

[2hot2handle]

That was dope. Great imagery and it flowed well. I coulod notice the pauses you had in that. You may want to make the lines a little longer but it flowed well. This had good emotion and was impressive. I might nominate it.

[Daz]

Goshdarnit.

I liked it. it was a poetic peace that spoke alot of truth.
I especially liked the part Sporigami quoted. I liked the whole thing.
Sounds like Def Poetry peice. would be dope spoken.

[Split]

i love it. flows like waves made my chest heave up and down. love from me

{splits wife}

[Split]

word, feed my ego

[Dan Dare]

This was pretty dope.. unusual style that you have, very unique, the structure kind of made this difficult to read, in a way. I liked this though man. A little vague at times, I didn't really get what you meant by the title for instance, but like Daz said, it spoke a lot of truth as well. Good concept, nicely executed. Nice job.

[Split]

^title was basically an analogy for cycles, particularly the cycles i go through, happiness to sadness, defeat to triumph... that kinda shit.

[I swallow]

^title was basically an analogy for cycles, particularly the cycles i go through, happiness to sadness, defeat to triumph... that kinda shit. Basiclly

[Split]

^^wtf?