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    Timeline

    Danger- Skribble

    The Real Me- Warchild


    Timeline

    My line of fate started way back in 98'
    The first time i heard a record that made my mind state shake
    Hip-Hop was born to me in a display of sorcery
    And i visualised the execution, what rewards could be
    I became a fanatic, my wrist ached from jotting my rhymes
    My brain was regulary jolted with shots to the spine
    Killer one liners from rhymers, my predessor's words
    Providing a bless to verbs, such finesse was absurd
    For 2 years i made garbage like household waste
    And looking back i can't help but laugh at that bold state
    An acne ridden teenage geek, plauged by ignorance
    But i perservered and i was lifted to deliverance
    I studied architects of the culture, the compound verses
    Discovered the technique of multi's and reduced my curses
    Elavated my vocab to a more sophisticated level
    Rebelled against the status quo and started to revel
    I heard 'The Mystery' by Rakim and learned imagery
    The blending of religion and beats in symettry
    It was 2002, i finally penned 'The Resurrection'
    And earned the cypher name '6-feet' for my meditations
    Tooks days for mental levitation, dined on mushrooms
    Bursts into hysteric in plush rooms, barriers to push through
    Witnessed the truth that we are all connected as one
    From a singular point of origin, more neglected than none
    Saw the whoring of the industry in every genre
    From the Brit-Pop of my childhood, unbalanced in karma
    Something to alarm ya, i couldn't help but let 'em
    I didn't have the power to stop them so my viens pumped venom
    Still i tuned my verbal weapons and advanced to audio's
    But my delivery was lacking, resulting in thwarted flows
    Back to chalk i go, the board, scribbling a new plan
    All i could do was perservere with the riddle and stand

    I rewind time, see what i can find in my timeline
    The evolution from a student to a true divine mind
    And now it's my time, to show the world how i shine
    And rewrite inscribed lines in my own timeline


    Defeat was not an option, so cold and frail
    And then a miracle happened called 'The Holy Grail'
    Some divine inspiration from the celestial wireless
    I saw it as proof of the Orisus inside us
    Realisation dawned of the potential surrounding existence
    Everything from books, movies and thoughts from a pissed sense
    Life's experiance, stories from modern to ancient cultures
    A broad mind shouldn't repulse ya, don't act like a vulture
    On the carcass of mediocraty, read the wisdom of Socrates
    The philosophies of Nostradamas, visions and prophesy's
    It was now 2004, and at a blistering pace
    I kept droping open mics for the bliss of the chase
    Collaberations across continents, pooling ideas
    Learning from each other's backgrounds and moving through years
    Paraphernalia and I, envisaged a mystic temple
    Where martial arts were mental, so cryptic, yet simple
    Old school cypher rhyming and posting results
    Regardless of the subject matter, even close to default
    The difference between 'sprint' and 'marathon' was illustraited
    In the fact my London friends made moves, the illities made it!
    Hit 'n' Run produced a blend of such brilliant variety
    Other crews were trying we, knew they were spying me
    But i'd never try to flee, i stayed surfing for beats
    And conjouring a strange magic for the worth of 'Unique'
    Some virgin ground, untouched by stumbling ego's
    Away from whores, clubs and weed blow, its more than i need though
    100 drops and counting, just trying to top the mountain
    Visualising a perfect rapper and finding a spot around him
    I left 'Deep' off my name because i haven't quite achieved
    A level so inspirational it isn't quite believed
    Still paying lisense fee's, it's more than hype i need
    I just want to plant knowledge and give light to seed's


    I rewind time, see what i can find in my timeline
    The evolution from a student to a true divine mind
    And now it's my time, to show the world how i shine
    And rewrite inscribed lines in my own timeline


    Pzz.
    Last edited by Johnny 6-feet; May 25th, 2005 at 10:41 AM

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    this shit was hot, you had a nice flow and had a real nice message in there...I like the concept of how you wrote on your elevation. You give knowledge to the newbies that at a time you did suck but you got better in time. And that's cool. and I liked the fact that u didn't consider yourself the best out there but that you do think you are unique and have a special skill....i was definitely feeling this.
    "I'm not a Bitch, and im not mean...
    I'm just not beat in the head for the bullsh*t"

    -kept real

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    That was some of the best shit I've read on this whole site. You're flow, rhymes, and vocab were superb. Your multis weren't just throwing words together either, you're sentence structure using multis was totally on point.
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    cheers for the positive feedback guys, i appricaite it.

    Uppin this one time^

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    Quote Originally Posted by Johnny 6-feet
    Danger- Skribble

    The Real Me- Warchild


    [CENTER]Timeline

    My line of fate started way back in 98'
    The first time i heard a record that made my mind state shake
    ^^^good first two lines, i like that

    Hip-Hop was born to me in a display of sorcery
    And i visualised the execution, what rewards could be
    ^^^deep lines
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    If i could i would comment on every lyric coz i liked that piece alot! Wordplay was good and structure was ok, jonny did it again! keep it up

    please return the favour! Cry (4ever)
    Last edited by Trema; May 24th, 2005 at 10:06 AM
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    alright.
    well done. It seemed kinda like your magnum opus to date, but also showing that there is more to come. Structure was good, imagery was nice. Vocab was well placed. Your multi's were well placed and helped the flow. Some of the words that you rhymed didn't quite rhyme in my head...(maybe it's the english accent :P) but other than that, this was a very well written piece.. I enjoyed it thoroughly, keep droppin, and thanks for the replies

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    ill piece kid,mos def hot,beautiful vocab and wordplay,nice rhyme scheme,multis were ill,tight structure,it had some nice emotion,all in all this piece was ill,keep droppin tha hottness.~1~


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    I like this, conecept is great man. Keep it up. Nice imagery.

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    Amazing.. you've thoroughly surpassed yourself here. I honestly have no real criticisms of this piece, wasn't the most original thing conceptually that I've ever read, but you definitely nailed it, in every sense. Strong multies throughout, good visuals, just an overall nice piece of work. Keep writing.
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    Woot! Finally got an open mic nomination, thanks for the replies gentlemen. Uppin this a second time^^

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    I liked this, the flow never fell off and though there are more original topics you definitely hit this with a lot of emotion and it at least seemed like you were really invested in the shit you were saying. My only real criticism would be not to force multis because there are a few questionable moments in there where you just kind of throw some shit in which isn't exactly pertinent to your purpose but that's just a small gripe, this is good. I've seen some of your other work and this is leaps and bounds beyond it, keep elevating man, you're getting better.

    Drop some feed if you would

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    Jay Dot sat down and read this. I mean I really read it and didnt scroll through. I liked it, I liked it a lot!

    You painted a picture with this piece and it flowed smoothly all throughout. I liked the opener and as you grew throughout your life.

    Hit N Run.
    Last edited by JAY DOT.; May 25th, 2005 at 04:23 PM

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    Cheers Jay Dot, i knew the crew's reppin' would pick up again

    Uppin this^^

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    I liked this.... Concept was excellent... Before I start that "give light to seeds" line was very thought provoking... Great analogy. Anyway... I enjoyed reading this. I haven't been here for that long as you know so I don't know a lot about people's pasts in writing so this was appealing to me from the start. I'm not usually a fan of the sort of "Oh look what I did" OMs because they're usually from people who haven't done anything... You clearly have and this piece showed it. This was a nice break from all the complex writing I read on SS and in here that I know you can write... I was expecting something different here, but was pleasantly surprised. All I can say really is to keep writing... Keep at it... You've got something going.

    Good luck... Thanks for the HoF nomination... First time in there for me this month with 2 pieces now... So thanks again.

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    Damn Johnny...This is the best piece i read from you.Excellent done.The flow was great,i liked the rhymescheme,and your multis didn't seemed forced at all.Nothing in fact seemed forced,all seemed so natural...I liked the imagery and the emotion.I feel that you really sat down on this one and thought it well.I hope you'll turn this in an audio buddy.I'm gonna nominate this for top 10 OM...

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