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    Eye Contact

    I drink deeply from the rim of a jar
    filled to the brim, teeming with creative juices
    my heartbeat displaced by the grace of her eye lashes
    Batting one thousand, profound and grown in a rich soil

    A glance in her soul crafts makeshift wings
    that i travel out of my mental labyrinth on
    Taking a crisp bite into her ripened mind
    Her heart a red delicious, plucked from purity

    I long to prolong every sunset on her iris horizon
    then steal peeks like a theif in the night
    bare soul, a frozen stare a scare crowed
    from the warm blackbird pie of her eyes

    Baked in a deep puddle of pain, i wade in the view
    Taking a pew at a sermon before a pastor of passion
    and raising my voice to the sprites of her sight
    Then slowly descend, drowning in those eyes...

    Mourning dew would trickle thick from my eyes
    If i ever lost her from this palace fashioned for love
    Never to fall through the cracks of the floor
    take the path from peace and pass through revolving doors

    But as the morning comes, on these planes of grace
    I painstakingly take a blink, all the while anxious
    waiting a lifetime to return to that burning sensation
    That i once tasted, swallowing the sight of her glowing embers

    But as i embrace inferno, i'm subjected to barren land
    eyes averted, submerged in more pressing tasks
    as the black clouds above my eyes on my brow loom
    a single raindrop stains the slopes of my smile

    1luv.
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    ...elevation is key, 1luv.
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    ....another elevation...1luv.
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    Nice one here Franklin.... kinda confused me for a little bit... but I read it over again, and its a nice poem.

    Great imagery.... and its a topic thats not all too common around, so it was a nice sort of get away poem....... I really liked how you described everything so well, but left room for people to dream if you will.... The last line just left so much to see.... you really did a nice job...


    PLEASEreply to my poem "Restless In My Sleep"



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    One last up...Shawty i promise i'll check tonight, 1luv.
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    I checked it Shawty, and i lied, one more up cause i want replies...1luv.
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    This poetry section has really gone downhill, shit.

    This poem was incredible and it has but one reply?


    "my heartbeat displaced by the grace of her eye lashes
    Batting one thousand, profound and grown in a rich soil"

    "Taking a crisp bite into her ripened mind
    Her heart a red delicious, plucked from purity"

    Wow. Those lines were amazing. This whole piece was extremely creative and original. I really enjoyed reading it. The unique descriptions and word choices in this piece were truly captivating. Nice ass job. Shame you don't get more replies.
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    ^Thanks DaGyrl, your words mean a lot to me, thanks for the positive response, elevation is key, 1luv.
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    Damn Fresh, i totally agree with DaGyrl on this one this piece was exquisite man, the imagery was dope and your word choice was really just on point, i couldn't really find flaw kid overall really strong, keep droppin homie...
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    ^Thanks a lot man, appreciate that you've been reading a lot of my work, and thanks again everyone else, elevation remains key, 1luv.
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