16-24 lines
First one to check in decides
Due Monday May 2nd before midnight eastern time
Topic: Summer activities
16-24 lines
First one to check in decides
Due Monday May 2nd before midnight eastern time
Topic: Summer activities
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I'd say set the line limit @ (20 Lines.)
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Wipe the mist of morning malice from my ariel perspective, brightening day.
At a heightening pace, the urge to have fun is frieghtening and yet plagued.
shoot hoops an get paid, is my 1st intention, & yet the reckoning takes rage.
Misguided mind states, lead me to blind dates, an wind up in a confined place
Tormented, n reminded of hate. reminscing of sniffing up lines on the plate.
Now im shackled & caged, awaitn arraignment to be takn away by the bailiff.
The corridors slim and adjacent, im too small 2 grab the wall an embrace it.
Cant take it no more, dont even wanna remember the tragedy that happened,
Dreams of fun, shattered! because of lustn over, only the dope that mattered.
Provoked in an instant... n driven to hysteria by the torment, of his own sins.
Considering relapse, and an ovadose, From methamphetamines & sedatives,
Alls irrelevant when the prose of prevalence exceeds at a total disadvantage,
So much... I could of had it! But chose not to grab it, instead chose a habit.
Back-bit, casted off the challenge because im petrified of the word abstinent.
I dont deserve to be taken serious, my actions really deserve a consequence,
Family, friends... my own kids, and even lovers, voted themselves outta this,
My notions... Arent common sense... I just react without having a conscience
Now I suffer, an wallow in my personal nonsense, with no judge of character
I wake up to cold walls, no privacy. even the paint on the walls is cracked up
My *summer activities* is held up another year, b/c of coke & a handgun...
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A deep breath of fresh air, life frolicking with no despair
The warm wind whisks so free, embracing everyone everywhere
Grass green with the leaves, swaying gently in the breeze
As the sun beats down, people take cover in the shade of trees
Pause for a noon time snack, watermelon and lemonade
Swimming pools are packed, relax in the cooling waves
Baseball games are played, stadiums open to the night
Seventh inning stretch, games played under the lights
Picnics in open parks, barbequing hotdogs and steaks
Going to the beaches, and swimming in the lakes
Naps in the sand, working on that farmers tan
Hoses to cool off, shade and misting fans
Midnight bonfires in backyards, drunkin dancing too
Roasting marshmellows for smores, always sumthin to do
Biking and joggin in the morning, hooping in the evening
Cool showers and air, give coolness a whole new meaning
Make the time last, cause fall is around the corner
When leaves change colors, and the cold gets bolder
No school to worry about, just relax and chill now
Enjoy it while it lasts, the good times will go on
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11:59pm...........................................
Laureate, its deadline time...................
nice uppn............. for feedback yall.............................................. ....
goodshit laureate...........
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Lyric - i thought you had really good emotion, and just you worded it greatly, that was a really good job.. although structure doesnt matter much..it was still a very solid set up, really good job with that... just all around a good verse. and nice concept.
Kalikoze - you suprised me, i didnt think you would do as good as you did, but Lyrics was just better, he had a better concept in my eyes, and just a more solid verse.. yours was cool, just nothing really stood out... but good job.
v. Lyric
MondoThugs.
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..damn hot battle...
..sorry but ill disagree with that..
Lyric- dope verse but I think what messed it up for you was tha flow and your structure...you had a dope concept but i think you coulda came much harder than that....overall your verse was a .....9.1/10...dope
Kalikoze- damn dope verse...you surprised me with your topikal skills...your flow and structure on point...dope concept but Lyric beat you in that category...you had good vocab. a lil better than Lyric's...overall your verse....9.2/10...barelty took this...watch out tho...if Lyric had his flow and structure on point...might of been a diff. opinion!....
v//Kali- no beef yall
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You did not jus vote on a topical/poetry TEXT battle based on flow and structure =/
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damn this was a crazy battle i like this shit your structure was real good and i iked how your flow went down i like that shit damn lyric had a good flow and shit but kali took this one just by alittle bit im out..damn hot battle...
..sorry but ill disagree with that..
Lyric- dope verse but I think what messed it up for you was tha flow and your structure...you had a dope concept but i think you coulda came much harder than that....overall your verse was a .....9.1/10...dope
Kalikoze- damn dope verse...you surprised me with your topikal skills...your flow and structure on point...dope concept but Lyric beat you in that category...you had good vocab. a lil better than Lyric's...overall your verse....9.2/10...barelty took this...watch out tho...if Lyric had his flow and structure on point...might of been a diff. opinion!....
v//Kali- no beef yall
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wow.....
votes here please .
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wow dis was an hot poetry battle i relly cant say how i voted on who cuz its hard to vote when both are so nice at the way they use words painting pictures with them making me feel like i was there from tha jump.
V-kali his verse was hot his vocabulary was superb and the way he handled the topical was extreme.
Kali came hard , we all kno his verses r sick , But this time i feel he aint takin it..They both was hot , but Laureate should be walkin away winnin this poetry battle..When i heard the topic "Summer Activites" I was thinkin bout the same thing laureate was ,not cocaine and a handgun , although kali made his points and came harder ...I cant vote but id say , laureate , u got it.
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