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    Speak Of The Devil

    At Dusk upon the crusted slopes of Mount Olympus, 3 great armies engage in combat, Poets, Actions, and Thoughts collide in a war waged for dominance. Heaven's soldiers of thought clash with the opposing soldiers of Hell's Actions, and the Literati. I fight for Poetry...


    Poetry, the plane separating actions and thoughts
    Earth wedged between yielding dreams and Elysian Fields
    The battleground is south of heaven, but on incline from Hell
    Writers fully clad in consonance, armed with alliteration
    fending off mindthirsty mercenaries of thought, gripping wind staffs
    in mass genocide against the other sides, sinful actions beckon death
    wordsmiths keep words unsheathed to defeat the opposing forces
    mountains of scripture soldiers laid by the wayside, succumbing to thought
    ideas off-spring our army, claiming our lives
    uninspired to write, they enlist our soldiers, swaying the fight
    but many more fall casualty to acting upon sins
    leaving a page, to speak, hear, and see evils
    none of these chains bind the glorious warriors of written word
    the fog of war falls over the battleground, but our army holds perception
    hell learned lessons through experience, we script it, they live it
    thought's soldiers are weary, unsure of either, blinded by haze
    taking shots in the dark and occasionally striking a page
    the gnashing of teeth and thrashing of souls holds hell in the lead
    satanic soldiers with cold hearts smother the hope of poets
    they convert our fighters to dissent their duties and abdicate the war of art
    i swing my great axe of ink without a chink in my armor
    harm befalls all in my range, i witness winged angels' bows striking actions
    fear of advancing an idea has heaven attacking Lucifer's troops
    the tides of change crash along the rock shore, blood soaking the ground
    the winged minions of God begin conversions of faith
    taking side with this army of arched authors, slinging quills at opposition
    placing verse to their wildest fantasies, the dynamic is shifting
    as anguished writers abandon the struggle and act upon lyric
    fear hits the heart of my fellow scribes, we've gained and lost
    great warriors like Langston have given way to a path of activism
    and the poets who are active Christians begin to see action as not that bad
    our shining shields of paper and pads begin to crumble
    the frontlines backed up to the crimson ocean of angels' corpses
    and hell's minstrels push forward executing poetry in motion
    i look around among my comrades that have been claimed victim
    i pick up the flag of free speech and it flaps in the breeze
    a wind created by the putrid breath of the Infs' onslaught
    born is a verse of the second coming, my pen produces apocalypse
    i feel there ain't no stoppin the awesome force of scripture
    Hell was raised and my savior activated decline
    however at dawn along the shore the Son of the Mourning is risen
    suspended in wonder, war is waged, fear pierces my pupils
    our front lines have been breached by the rebels, my messiah turns
    braces himself for the final battle and says to me "Speak of the devil.."
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    Elevation is key...1luv.
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    grrr....elevation is the key, 1luv.
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    damn dude, thats some deep stuff, im surprised i understood it but i think i did

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    ^Well thanks...probably my last up...1luv.
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    let me just start by saying...WOW BRILLIANT...your lines chosen at the begining of the peice set it up brilliantly and lead into a well written peice...i really don't know what to say about this other than it is well written with morphologically complex lexis...good vocab in other words...it reads well...although i did need to read one or two lines back again but that's probably just me...just punctuation that you need to work on which will help with the way that the peice reads...other than that i don't think that there is anything else that i can say other than you chose a good topic and wrote about it confidently and very very successfully...The battleground is south of heaven, but on incline from Hell, Writers fully clad in consonance, armed with alliteration...are just a choice of two of my favorite lines...it was a difficult choice though with so many to choose from...you don't need me to tell you this but keep on elevatin!!!

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    let me just start by saying...WOW BRILLIANT...your lines chosen at the begining of the peice set it up brilliantly and lead into a well written peice...i really don't know what to say about this other than it is well written with morphologically complex lexis...good vocab in other words...it reads well...although i did need to read one or two lines back again but that's probably just me...just punctuation that you need to work on which will help with the way that the peice reads...other than that i don't think that there is anything else that i can say other than you chose a good topic and wrote about it confidently and very very successfully...The battleground is south of heaven, but on incline from Hell, Writers fully clad in consonance, armed with alliteration...are just a choice of two of my favorite lines...it was a difficult choice though with so many to choose from...you don't need me to tell you this but keep on elevatin!!!

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    Be my lover???
    consider this nominated
    edit: grrr fiasco beat me too it
    Last edited by Space Cadet; April 22nd, 2005 at 07:41 PM

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    ^^ Nice.


    Imaginary was fucking dope. You explained every detail in this piece. Although this is a poem, i say "fuck flow". Anyway, great piece, nice words, vocab was decent. Dont stretch your lines that much man. Ok the emotion of this verse was there, i say next time put down some hard emotion, i want to feel what the character was feeling man, cause you did a "little" of that in your verse, but i want more. Nice drop, keep it up.

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    Da Bomb

    u think u can rap
    but i no ur crap
    u cant beat me
    because im blak
    u wont understand
    when u cant stand
    U WANNA BATTLE ME
    I CAN RAP TILL DA DAY I DIE AND U WILL STLL BE AT HOME WONDERIN Y
    Last edited by jam master; April 23rd, 2005 at 08:27 AM Reason: BEACAUSE IT WAS TOO SHORT

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    Quote Originally Posted by jam master
    u think u can rap but i no ur crap
    u cant beat me because im blaku wont understand
    when u cant stand U WANNA BATTLE ME
    I CAN RAP TIIL DA DAY I DIE AND U WILL STLL BE AT HOME
    WONDERIN Y!!!!!!!!

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