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Thread: The Hunger The Outcome

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    The Hunger The Outcome

    The wallpaper is torn away like the feelings in her heart
    The life she cradles in her arms was fiending from the start
    The womb contaminated by a poision in the worst way
    If the guardian is helpless then of course the curse strays
    She opens her legs up for twenty minutes then the men speak
    They call her a slut and laugh this is how she makes ends meet
    The rent money is now available but the bastard grabbed it and fled
    She chokes on her tears not cause of pride cause the habbits not fed
    The life she lives maybe mean, but as soon as the baby screams
    She still doesnt seem to respond to reality this aint a crazy dream
    Beat downs and broken hearts is the world she was given
    All she sees is a breathing burden when the girls in her vision
    Old associates say 'its so sad' words under their breaths the rest say
    She exits her duties gets her JOY from a neighbour she'll pay the next day
    She returns home puts the product on top and puts a lighter to the spoon
    Her moods are so savage six months ago she put a knife into her womb
    Her arm is tied up then jabs the needle into the vain
    Now contemplate if shes really free from all the pain
    She lays back with no sound as IT screeches through her blood stream
    Her mind reads i dont love this addiction but it just seems to love me
    A gush of wind from the open door wakes her from her short coma
    She looks around the room with a sharp view her thoughts over
    She only held one thing sacred, to kick it the bitch wasnt able
    In a sorry pose her body froze the baby was missing from the cradle

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    deep shit....real deep
    i like stuff that means more than whats being said

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    It was ight

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    The True Psycho of RB
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    LOL its funny how i get a lot of replies for a piece about the pope coming back from the dead but when i write a deeper piece i get 2 replies.
    THANK FOR SLEEPING ON MY PIECE.

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    The True Psycho of RB
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    Ive just replied to 5 peoples posts and i replied to 5 yesterday so how about returning some feed people this piece aint that bad.

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    deep piece... i liked it ... interesting read... lot of emotion... vocab was decent ... maybe i missed em but i didnt really see alot of mutlies ....overall i liked it...thanks for the feed on my piece ...

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    3 replies lol this is probably one of the nicest pieces on open mic and its get slept on no hated on most of the open mics on here are bullshit boring thug shit more feed more feed haters.

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    I liked it man...I usually dont read alot of open mics all the way through

    ur wordplay was nice,

    when I was readin it I had the bonnie and clyde beat in my head...went good..

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    Reall deep i feel the way u came at that .... nice word play

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    Shit how about some real feed not just one sentence replies.

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    Uppin.

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    like woah

    damn bro nice peice for sure, was very deep ...
    had good vocab and painted some nice imagry...
    keep doin ur thang

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    Appreciate the feed i still think this shit is being slept on though.

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    Drink so9me coffee and stop sleeping.

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