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    A cubist poet

    A cubist poet





    Pain flows from my pen when I skillfully graze the paper,
    It runs in my veins, rains dreadfully for me to craze like Satan,
    Writing in the shadow of poetry’s skyscraper,
    In slavery’s chains I phrase from my spiritual craters
    My art…a reflection of my soul, importing the feelings in my heart,
    In a quest for perfection I crawl, distorting reality till I rip’er apart,
    Rearrange it like a sage then exporting it in a complete new form,
    To encaged minds and blind eyes re-forming into street cuneiform,
    Just because cold may be warm………. an unity may be torn…
    Most don’t understand art unless it’s flat like a platform…
    But I’m still elite brainstorming,deep transforming into hidden art,
    My poetry it’s like arabic geometry, a riddle from the start,
    And I twiddle with words that stop your world from spinning,
    You need to cut your umbilical cord and start breathing
    To understand my true lyrical meaning,
    Because I’m empirically concealing the essence of my lines,
    Subliminally displaying excellence,annealing my every rhymes,
    Shining only to trained eyes and minds,not constrained to simplicity,
    Shining in the eyes of those whom are ingrained in authenticity…

    This is my black period and I insist you know it,
    I’m something like Picasso,only that I’m a cubist poet...


    I know this was kinda short,but i wanted to post something...
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    Very nice piece...your first 4 lines to me actually widened my eyes up...im glad to see this type of talent in RB...

    Writing in the shadow of poetry’s skyscraper,
    In slavery’s chains I phrase from my spiritual craters

    These lines to me were like whoa...very creative...your poetry is truly at an elevated level...which is a great thing for RB...to see cats like you gives me hope...excellent imagery in this piece made things simple to picture which i think is a huge part in poetry...respect...if you get a chance peep my latest-E-...

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    This wasn't the best I saw from you man, but still DAMN! lol.

    You're vocab is so on point, I don't think I've seen a poet like you on this site. You express so well and Im impressed by each of your pieces, You have yet to let me down. I said this piece was weaker, but that didn't mean it was ant less meaningful. One of the only flaws I seen in this was that the story didn't come across all that well imo, but you still had the lines to carry the piece. And the closer was my favourite line of the whole thing, you did well to seperate it from the verse because I think it stood out on its own.

    Great work man, Kepp them coming!

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    I liked this piece. Vocab was there as usual. The wordplay you put in worked, strengthened the image. The verse flowed nicely with the multis supporting it. Word choice was nice, it described the feelings well, allowed you to go in detail. The closing was a nice touch, separating it from the verse, to give it stronger impact. The image you created made it a nice drop.
    http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=185738

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    Nice drop fam.

    First off, your vocab was there as usually. I don't think you have a problem with that. Nice smooth flow. I've really seen a lot of improvment the structure of your pieces over the past few months. As far as your imagery, your use of vocab allows you to be very descriptive in all of your writtings. You already know this was really good. One thing I would like to see you start doing (and something I'm trying to work on myself) would be to add moer internal rhymes and multi's to your writings to add to the complexity of your pieces. That the only thing I think we could both really work on. But this was a very well written, classic K9 ish.

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    dug the topic and the structure man. some great imagery and wordplay in this piece as well. the vocab was good but i think you went just a little overboard in places. but this was a dope little read and well worth the effort.

    Writing in the shadow of poetry’s skyscraper,

    ^^great line^^

    keep reppin us right man.

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    ^ wow at that last person. anyways this was very nice. i disagree with j6f i dont think you went overboard at all i thought this was very very good. the word choice was excellent and that is what made this piece. the words you chose in your metaphors set such an increbile image and your personafacation was excellent. very nice piece. i am so proud to be fam with you.
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    thx for the feeds guys.really apreciated...
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    this is a very good deep song i was feelin it man good verse and everythin just work a little on flow and it should be perfect aight overall verse rate 9.0/10

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    ^did u at least read it?
    nah...
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    K9 this wasa nice piece... You wrote consistantly and with great imagery. You're improving very quickly. The imagery was very good... The early lines were excellent - They really showed great skill. The topic was very nice aswell... It attracted me when I saw it the first time I just haven't had much time. You had good vocabulary and maintained a good flow throughout... I was impressed.

    Nice work... If you could check my latest piece out http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/show...79#post2304379 I'd appreciate it.

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