The writings of an Immortal soul...True poetry

[K9_THESHIT]

I recommend you read it carefully so you can try to understand my own thoughts…and tell me if you think is Hall of Fame material...

The writings of an Immortal soul






In my own lustful greed for perfection I need to possess inside poetic seed,
Disowning majority’s creed…a damned mind to live by an ascetic believe,
The only true art comes from spiritual bleed,what heart thru pain can conceive,
Living in the shadow of rationality in quest for a perceptive spirituality,
Filtering thru my soul reality,I adapt its inanity thru presumptive mentality,
Pleading for a lost concept of eternality,I feel pounding in me ephemerality,
As I melt away in time and space I interlace different visions on living,
I race to a point I’m imprisoned in dreaming and then retrace to the beginning,
Collapse within myself like a dieing nova and spawn a heavier core,
I now once again explore my inner thoughts again just to furthermore
Fall inside my evermore pain for writing, crawling in vain inside of me,
What was not said before…a whispery voice calm as the aureole,
Spoken softly: nevermore…………………………….nevermore…


But I still linger in that which makes my heart shiver like body entrapped by fever,
Sometimes tumultuous like a mountain river, my inner soul of a nonbeliever,
Believes in that which tends to perfection…purified by the mirror reflection,
Thoughts wander in every direction in my internal eternal insurrection,
I am just a thought…the response to a question about infinite aspiration,
The forsaken depths of my mind have sealed the truth from my own soul,
I am just an epigone…I now drone in the emptiness of my spiritual home,
I am just an answer…the response to the impossibility of a paragon,
…A cancer devours me from deep within my own soul because now I know,
I am nothing but a passing shadow in the infinite deepness of the Time,
I am just a thought…just a smile…just a moment in the eternity of Time…


Perfection it’s out of reach…all that I can do is enrich with my every hemistich,
I am just a wave crushing on the beach…………I am just a hair of grass,
I am just a grain a sand in Time’s infinite Hourglass……………………


Under the cloak of Time all falls apart except for pure creations of art,
Passing down unwritten in the mind but echoing slow in the beholder’s heart,
Perfection never to be my own…But Immortality to have in your soul…

[K9_THESHIT]

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[K9_THESHIT]

uppin...DON'T SLEEP ON THIS ONE!

[djb]

this is dope. i liked it a lot. i have wrote many pieces very similar to this. i think everybody wants to achieve a written piece that will stay with people for their entire lifetime and then be passed on. you made the subject very relateable. the lines were a bit streched and it got slow in a couple parts. the word choice was good. i just would have liked to see a change up in the rhyme scheme, it became a little bit predictable. other then that. it was excellent. i was just picking on small things. but this was dope. dont mind my nit picking

[iNFiNiTE A]

yoo dat was deep dope.. and damn fuckin great!... the entire peice was dope... i also hate it when ppl sleep on a good drop.. it pisses me off. well nice job on it

[K9_THESHIT]

Thx for the feeds so far guys.Want more...

[K9_THESHIT]

leave linkz so i can return the favour.

[Na~Ledge]

Ill drop as usually fam. The only flaw I could find in it at all was like DJB said some of the lines seemed a little stretched, but usually when the content is good that doesn't matter, and it was in this case. It hard to decide which one I like better, this one or the first one. Bot dope piece, too bad their getting slept on, but what u gonna do. Anyway exceptional vocab, great topic man. Kinda like the pursuit of perfection idea. Knew it would be hot. Keep droppin Fam. Uppin ur next drop.

[K9_THESHIT]

thx Na.looks like this is gettin slept on too.damn shame...

[Jay Walker]

This was pretty cool. The vocab you used in here was really good, no doubt, but your lines were a little to long. Some lines were even more stretched than others, at a few points, which threw off your flow even more. Either way though, this was a good piece. The story and just the words used make up for anything that negative...just try and work on those lines being a little shorter and more of a roll of the tounge, then I can imagine some HoF pieces. Peace.

[K9_THESHIT]

thx jay

[big j da fat boy]

yo dawg you had great vocab an deep emotin into this peice . it did get a lil slow at times but it would probably work better on audio. but a great peice an yeah id say its hall of fame worthy

[Ghetto Superman]

K9_THESHIT....Battle me!!!! Holla back at me so we can battle...or r u scared??? Ill set it up after u answer me punk!!!!

[K9_THESHIT]

^i don't have any time to waste on u

[Johnny 6-feet]

you brought some fire here K9, glad to have you on the roster. the concept was a strong one, very important. your vocab was strong for the most part without being too difficult to follow. you fit a fair few rhymes and multi's in which helped the flow. the imagery was plain crazy.

"I am just a thought…the response to a question about infinite aspiration,"

fav line^. my only criticism really is that i think you overstretched your lines. but in all other areas you definately pulled your wieght.

hit me up for a collab sometime mate, keep up the good work.