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    robots report the news

    Wisdom and theory is lost in a cloud of smoke
    blown up by atomic bombs dusting all our hope
    the media promotes themselves and not the issues
    they cuts scenes from, celebs to fathers with tissues
    it’s you who they grab with commercial teasers
    “he shot them because....” then no response lingers
    stingers rest inside me wondering about that family
    while happily the news skips to dolphins swimming
    trimming the facts to back a rehearsed class act
    no sadness intact, just snakes with hair combed back
    not like sports I pro-act, do and just not say
    change the way peter jennings must relay
    stay true to the cause, rock for liberty not applause
    a clause to robot reporters must exist no shift or pause
    they skip topic to topic emotionless in suits
    dispute nothing the prompter is all that computes
    repute characteristic characterize these characters
    they fake glare as we stare without care at him or her
    centered on senselessness our society has gone numb
    some t.v. personality’s telling me if I am smart or dumb?
    Those machines get force fed through earpieces
    watch peace cease and let our worse fears leash us
    scare tactics and color codes cannot fool me
    I know this is simply another ploy for ratings
    im not debating I am really playing some hardball
    I will charge all until this house of cards falls
    appalled how they flash from a grieving mother
    switch to another island cast off or bachelors brother
    shudder at the thought of our nation being in this state
    irrate that desensitization has sealed our country’s fate
    contemplate another way to escape the media circus
    but clowns will give news about nothing reguardless
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    You need to leave 2 links to 2 open mics that you left decent feedback on or this gets closed, Thanks.

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    Nice work fam.......the whole read was very nice. Vocab, flow, concept, everything was on piont. Keep the good work bro!

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    good drop djb...a well chosen topic,but i feel you could've gone a little deeper in this,touch more aspects on the issue.anyway,felt this...i was thinkin to drop one on this subject but from another perspective,but didn't feel like writing it...back to you.liked your flow(more multis would've made it better,but it's still good),good structure and vocab.nice emotions and ideas in it.overal a nice read.fav part:

    "centered on senselessness our society has gone numb
    some t.v. personality’s telling me if I am smart or dumb?
    Those machines get force fed through earpieces
    watch peace cease and let our worse fears leash us" - deep and true...liked very much the way you expressed your feelings on that matter(with some anger in your thoughts)

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    Really Nice Piece.......good Topic, Stayed Focus With Ya Rhymes......... Nice Flow.........liked Reading This.........like Dude Said Tho', There Could Have Been Alot More Said, But Short And Sweet, To The Point Is The Topic, So Keep Droppn Homie................always Like Reading Topicals........
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    djb please drop a feed in "Writings of an Immortal soul" in my sig.tell me what you think
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    this great it had ery thang vocab, emotion , thought you asked for a feed so here it is.
    i sent word perfect my verse so look for it on her in a couple of days. peace out

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    this was a nice topic to touch on.... i can relate to wat ur feelin about the bullshit they be puttin on the news.... i would agree with k9 u could of touched some more on it but it was still a very nice read....the emotion perfected this.... strutcure was nice.... vocab was also on point for this drop....good shit, i enjoy readin ur OM's
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    I liked the topic, you had some good ideas. The piece flowed nicely, and there was vocab scattered throughout. You were descriptive in your concepts, which helped developed the story. I thought the rhyming was good, supported the flow well. You out emotion in the verse, nice drop.
    http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=178612

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    thanks up
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    all favors have been returned. drop links with your feed.
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    upping this for some more feed.
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    Shit's Hot, i can feel a lot of what you write about in the piece, steady tone throughout, nice use of words.

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    yeahhh. very very nice, yo. flow flow. nice vocab. the only advice i can think to give you is maybe be a little more specific, like bring it back home man. make it even more personal. that was deep though. respect.
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