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    How much do you pay?

    Love confiscates freedom
    Enter its kingdom and give up the gold
    Where sacrifices unfold to an empty mold
    Of a cold heart and regretful feelings
    The ceiling begins to crumble
    As walls fold to prison bars
    Given scars to memory’s frame
    As it holds its picture far
    From the paint, still in jars
    Brushes restrained to claim the stars
    Constellations turned to games
    Of connect the dots as love rots
    So how much do you pay?
    Because love is never free
    Vexed upon the vessel
    Of fates false certainty
    When all you had is lost
    Amidst the sunset of lament
    Sweat like bullets from a gun
    Dropping like missiles in cement
    Could’ve spent more time thinking
    Of what love truly meant
    Was it worth it all?
    To alter life’s existence
    To fit the seams of passion
    And fall off into the distance

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    upping......

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    Wow...that was really dope, the imagery was brilliant and i really enjoyed your approach to the topic...the ending was elegant and really lets the reader off gently, a very dope poem Mez, much respect, please return the favor on my piece "My Love Poem" good job, stay up...1luv.
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    I liked it. It flowed very nicely in an elegant way like Dafamous said.

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    yo im really feeling that shit alot its some good shit. damn maybe i should start poems an say fuck battles lol but good job

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    Dope very dope.. I loved the whole feel that it had to it. REal nice job mez the emotion was good and over all the presentation was real nice.

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    upping cause your you 1luv.
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    hehe, your dope^

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    Nice pieace,only thing really you could work on is vocabulary.
    It had emotion and imagery and meaning,good job.

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    i can tell you wrote this for me cuz it was so dope

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    uppity up.....................

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    upping, last time

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