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    Jekyll & N-Demik - Tattooed Notebooks

    I’m Van Goghing my plans - on canvas, for kids to breathe in
    Scribbling the annals of a crying soul, do I need another reason?
    For I’m spying: whole revolutions going to waste, taste’s demonic
    Running rings around Sonics, flip a coin - Tales is the mnemonic:
    “Tracing All Life, Entwined in Sight” - a Mighty Morphin’ endorphin!
    Scorching, brain’s reacting, painting facts is taxing my vital organs
    17.5% proof – etching aloof sketches, stretching the roof, yet ..
    .. I’m trying to write deep and shit, & I keep forgetting my wet suit!!
    Guess who’s next to test, bless be, the name I can’t forget -
    Plus I’m trying to leave prints to remember me by in the wet cement
    Serving a sentence in the literature asylum, applying nonsense
    Stitching content into the fabric too, I’m creating, a woven nexis
    I feel it in my solar plexus, the onus is on the man to prove himself
    I loose myself in character - plots and subplots that move in stealth
    I knew too well, that things would unravel this way, toward death
    Destruction and panic set themselves, destined suicide’s a safe bet
    Yet unpaid debt amounts, surmounts what’s feasible or logical
    My nominal speech is mute, it’s deeply rooted & it branches
    My verses have hooked hands, & this pirate’s boat is took
    I’m intent on doing whatever I can..
    .. with my worn tattooed notebooks



    Sacrificing the pen and pad for keying my sentence on lap's
    inventing the facts, exact in declaring my two cent's- the fad!
    Independent in labs as I tap my pipe dreams til prime drainage
    for the ideal's to hit until time's wasted and that defines patience
    Find creation in sporadic inanimateness under the lit halogenous
    & convert that palette of thoughts like supercalifragilisticexpialidocious
    Into the main focus of my token expertise, bleed an expert thesis
    exert reasons to oil the cogs and mind mechanics of my cerebrum
    It's only part of the secretion from my grand scheme completion
    that's ever seeping deep within the screens of you obsolete beings
    Trace the rhythm- therefore embracing it's excellence, a Midas choice
    meanwhile training in etiquette scales forever tuning my writers voice
    Question myself for motivation, keep a one step pace above relaxation
    script the observations, then encrypt the eye candy to attract faces
    Being contempt with concepts until one sets in and I'm contemporary
    going the artistic route, eventually all the way to the end of entry
    Even then it's not complete, an abundance of inspirational brooding
    including afternoon awareness anxiety, aspiring the society of music
    Never elusive to the illusive, my astuteness.. I'm constantly using
    a war in itself- my hemispheres, eyes, ears, arms, limbs..
    .. always feuding.
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    this was dope.. both of you got really into it, i mean really thought out.. the vocav was nicely in depth.. and the flow steadied it along, some nice examples of imagery through good descritpion gives a good visual, so badically you both did your thing, check this out

    http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=176138
    Good Luck. You're Gonna Need It.

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    Last edited by Dan Dare; March 11th, 2005 at 12:24 AM
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    yo that shit was pretty hot yo not that gangsta but still hot

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    I cant stand demiks sections.

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    No, it wasn't that gangster.

    So, Center Sight's reply was returned promptly.
    Last edited by Dan Dare; March 11th, 2005 at 11:59 AM
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    good job....

    i really likes Jekyll's, my favorite part was

    "

    I’m Van Goghing my plans - on canvas, for kids to breathe in
    Scribbling the annals of a crying soul, do I need another reason?
    For I’m spying: whole revolutions going to waste, taste’s demonic
    Running rings around Sonics, flip a coin - Tales is the mnemonic:
    “Tracing All Life, Entwined in Sight” - a Mighty Morphin’ endorphin!
    Scorching, brain’s reacting, painting facts is taxing my vital organs"

    the first 6 lines were great, i like how they all worked together, and stuff...

    so you did a really good job both of you, and N-Demik, i liked :

    "exert reasons to oil the cogs and mind mechanics of my cerebrum
    It's only part of the secretion from my grand scheme completion
    that's ever seeping deep within the screens of you obsolete beings
    Trace the rhythm- therefore embracing it's excellence, a Midas choice
    meanwhile training in etiquette scales forever tuning my writers voice"

    that part was great, by far the best part of your work, great job..
    MondoThugs.

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    I am going to quote this line in my sig...

    & convert that palette of thoughts like supercalifragilisticexpialidocious
    Your writing really meshed well, probably a top ten drop. Best I have seen from Dan too. Peace.
    can I kick it?

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    occasionally obscurce, but i loved the concept and the strength of vocab from you two. the first verse was packed out with multi goodness and strong imagery. the second had really strong imagery. not much more to say, you gelled well together and i hope you write another piece.

    and keep on posting.

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    Johnny's reply was returned, I can't see anything to reply to from Luke or Jeremy, if there's anything you'd like replies too, then PM me.

    And Luke, if you thought it was top ten, you think you could maybe nominate it?
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    Both of u did ur thing but I was really feeling the first verse. The Vocabulary in both lines was excllent. Really help to develop ur imagary to paint a clear picture of the point u wre trying to get across. Maybe it was just me but the structure seemed off in a couple of lines but nothing to get in a fuss over. Overall was a Ill drop.


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    Na~ledge's reply was returned.
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    Jekyll You talented as shit man...

    Nice... NIce Nice...Feelin the opener that keep my attention going


    Demix was tight to too cept when u said supercalhfhfhfhf lol

    Nah dope shit

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