A Keystyle about Feedback

[Na~Ledge]

Verbal mastery is apart of me......artistry at its apex
A reflection of perfection in the present........and yet
Disrespect runs rampant although often undeserved
Post disected to find flaw, true meanings go unobserved
Eloquite phrases fall upon the blind eyes and deaf ears
Of swiftly dismissive vultures cleaverly cloaked as peers
Offer jeers instead of guidence, making elevation self-attained
And self-explained, then act surprised when ones self stays the same
Closed minded leaders pursuing a quest to acquire self-praise
...............Often make constant cameos on Rb's now a dayz
Hostage holders of a wealth of knowledege, unaware how the rob
Newbs like myself with bullshit post like..." ILL PIECE. NICE JOB.
HEY CHECK OUT MY LASTES POST IF YOU CAN FIND THE TIME
AND MAKE SURE THAT ALL UR FEEDBACK IS A COUPLE OF LINES."
The fatal story is, heads will read this and the shit still won't stop
Don't worry newbs, will make it, and I'll be uppin your next drop


I hope a lot of the people who've been here for a while will read this, but the probably won't so fuck it I guess.BLAH.

[Na~Ledge]

http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=175705
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=175688

[Na~Ledge]

lol at my point gettin proved.....................uppin

[ThE kId BiG]

lol... i really like this cause' its fucking true, just cause' ''we the noobs'' are ''noobs'' they tend to overlook our shit. hey, make it LONGER and put up the rest

[Na~Ledge]

^thanx man

[ThE kId BiG]

can you return the feedback:

http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/show...06#post2145806

[Na~Ledge]

nothing....still nothing...damn shame...uppin

[Na~Ledge]

the bump

[Jay Mel]

Vocab was sick
The flow was good
The structure was good


Stay up man, this is a good piece and original...Stay up!

[Na~Ledge]

thanks for the feed.....bumpidy

[Chris Black]

This shit was ill. The word choice was very nice. Flow was on and the content was dope. I was surprised. I was expecting some wack shit, but you came nice with it. Good job. Keep writing, homie.

[K9_THESHIT]

"Eloquite phrases fall upon the blind eyes and deaf ears
Of swiftly dismissive vultures cleaverly cloaked as peers
Offer jeers instead of guidence, making elevation self-attained"-so damn true.something like beauty is in the eye of the beholder,but what if the behloder is blind.great drop...should've thought of something similar since i'm facin the same problem:it's hard to get yar pieces read,yar ideas understood when ya's a newbie.very original drop,very,very true...structure was good,vocab good,some sarcasm in there,but what really this makes this piece ill it's the message.REALLY felt it,and many will,if they read it...cuz like ya said "I hope a lot of the people who've been here for a while will read this, but the probably won't".great job!

please return the feed...just jokin'

[Na~Ledge]

^lol.........thanks for the feed k9, lookin 4 ur next drop....uppin

[AbusivE]

Haha didn 't you do something like this about open mic too? anyways, this was good, you got describing and creative with every line wich made it a good read, and everything you said in here is true, very few leave decent feed. i didn 't notice to many multis, maybe i just missed them but that didn 't really matter, your flow was very good, your word choice of multis were also very good. lol i liked your finisher. but yeah this was a good drop, something original.. keep it up!

[CrazyCarl]

The topic was good, because it is true. Brought up some good points. Vocab was nice, and I think it supported your message, made it not seem like a rant, and more of an intellectual look at it. Flow was nice and you went in depth with your concepts.