Hip Hop

[youngsolja05]

I hold the crowd tight, like a transvetite
on open mic, rocking them all night
In the club or at the Jam, what’s the plan, what’s the deal
I keep it real, while other MC’s don’t feel
the sheer power of a mic rocker, party stopper, boogie popper,
a lyricist, with a tendency to rip
fully equipped, no you’re not...Bullshit!!
As I practice and preach, systems will breach
My style be one that you cannot teach,
Free-flowing, mindblowing, never ending
Minds twisted, suspending, bodies bending
Reacting, to the call of servitude, step up with that attitude
Don’t be rude...Respect me!
And you’ll gain respect, but let me make it clear
that you’re gonna have to rep...
cause in this game, there’s no time for suckers
No time for chumps, no to motherfuckers
Catch a breath of this skill
You’re bound to fall, hard to the ground, back to the wall
Ashamed and nameless, anonymous in the crowd
Just a spectator, who you done proud?
If you ain’t one of us, then please don’t diss
The culture is vast and the support is endless,
In this world, people are equal
And heroes walk amongst the people.
Hip Hop is in your bod, Hip Hop is in your brain
The excitement involved is crazy insane,
Woop Woop, That’s the sound of KRS.....
A man with ideas, a true genius
A teacher, a student, preacher and a triple feature
started consciousness, what more you need to hear?
From the ghetto’s of Brooklyn to the camps of Langa
People are united and the force becomes stronger,
Like Luke in Star Wars pix,
Chewie, Yoda equipped with Jedi Mind Tricks
It’s all relative to the world we live in
Darwin’s theory, this is how it all begins...
With a “big bang” and thing called evolution
Through Ice Age and the Industrial Revolution,
Wars of the World have come and gone,
People have died but still the world goes on...
How many need to suffer, to feel the pain
How many need to die wishing, wishing for rain
And all we can think about is ourselves and our riches
Our BMW’s, Benz’s and bitches.
fucking selfish creatures, are you & I
I fear the life we living, is one great big lie...

[sick thoughtz]

i give this a 80 on the 100 scale

[Mistral]

You need to leave 2 links to 2 open mics that you left decent feedback on or this gets closed, Thanks.

[youngsolja05]

Gimme some feedback

[warchild]

I thought this piece was tight but it has flaws.
The structure was good but you need to work on the bar structure.
The vocab was above average which always helps a verse stand out.
The flow was average but the more you write the more you'll improve it.
It was a good mixture of deep meaningfull rhymes and a couple of sly punches.
Overall this was a nice post.

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